What is your opinion?
Awesome plot
"The plot is awesome..... wow is am looking forward to read it....."
A good book
"This novel is a good book."
Good start
"Can I suggest using https://prowritingaid.com/en/Analysis/WebEditor/Go?redirectToDocs=true it is free. Some of the technical or wording might change when you re read or edit the completed story so that it reads or flows better. The start of the scene you might want to open up with a date when the lady is reading the paper. I went from that scene to thinking 1600s? Thanks for sharing."
Nightmarishly compelling
"The story itself is very compelling with potential. Perhaps a little too short, might add a little more depth to the main protagonist. Feelings of anxiety and doubt of really being dead is what I perhaps miss (The girl is a little too calm, or even stoic and placid for her situation). Other than that, I hope you continue with more chapters and make it into a full story. It could have a budding future. Good job author. Stay healthy and safe P.S: would appreciate a review or comment on my own work. Thank you"
An intriguing plot
"An interesting plot The paragraphs are out of sync which makes it a tough plog to read through Make sure you only have 1 single space between paragraphs The story itself could use filling out, try adding a bit more descriptions, what you and your character is seeing around them, in rooms and more if their feelings It’s not easy at first , but the more you do the easier and more fun writing stories becomes Hope this helps. You have have the talent:)"
Good Start!
"You've got some good groundwork- an interesting plot to work on. Your short sentences and chapter also make it easy for the reader to read through the chapter. I do have a little constructive critique, however: as a short story, the paragraphs shouldn't break in the middle of a sentence. In poetry, that's okay as enjambment, but in a short story it chops the pace up a little. Here and there, words are misspelt, out of place and the punctuation can be off. I think you could also develop the story into something EVEN MORE interesting and engaging by adding some description and employing the technique 'show not tell', which though difficult, I'm sure you'll manage if you try your hand at it! A greater variety of sentences and descriptions would still make the story easy and fun to read (if the sentences aren't awkward) while making the scenes in the chapter reel through the reader's mind like a film and adding more variety in the pace. Descriptive word choice can also enhance emotion. However, I have to commend you on crafting a short story, written with so little words, which is easy to follow plot-wise and makes sense. (I'm not sure why the man disappeared to the end, but generally I understood everything, and I suppose it leaves the reader open to imagine the reason) I also really liked the poignant and realistic ending: that she convinced herself she'd surely had a nightmare. Keep going and good luck with your writing!"
Keep up the good work
"The story is quite interesting to read and the best thing is that the author tries to maintain reader interest in reading, i also like the way suspense is added although punctuation marks are added in wrong order (example inverted comas are upside down), secondly there is quick shift of scene and new scene is not been introduced properly which made me a little confused. The plot of the story and over all theme is really good Thank you for sharing!!!"
The nightmare
"This story was good, but hard for me to read. The punctuations weren’t put properly, the grammer needs more work. The plot is engaging. "
