What is your opinion?
An Outstanding Start
"A very relevant story for our times. The emotion captured about the tension of an interracial relationship in a very racist time truly tugs at a reader's heart, and sets up the rest of the story very well. Going forward, I would definitely focus a little more on letting the reader "see" more of the scenes rather than jumping straight into the dialogue, and you also have a golden opportunity to expand further upon the emotions the characters feel. Other than that, this is a book well worth reading, and I look forward to future chapters! Keep up the good work!"
"Bloody brilliant"
"Honestly, I would have loved a longer prologue but I understand why you didn't do it. Apart from that, *chef's kiss* perfect. I loved the tone, pace, and the characters. Right from the get-go, we see Raymond as a family man, and snippets of that can be seen in the Prologue as well. Sarah, well, I got to see little of her, but whatever I've seen so far is bloody brilliant. I can't wait to read the rest of this book! Cheers to the author. x Vanessa"
A great story
"The start of the story really got me hooked. I loved the fact that you opened with some dialogue. It makes the story unique and refreshing. Another thing I loved is your perfect technical skills. You had no noticeable errors and I commend you for that. And after going through your profile and seeing that you were eighteen years old, I have to say that your work is advanced for a young writer and I am impressed. However, I also noticed a few issues in style like the use of adverbs and the lack of description. I also realized that you tend to tell rather than show, which can have a poor impact on the reader. Yet, I was impressed by your dialogue and the distinct voice and speaking patterns of your characters. I also thin that your story is very relevant given the current issues in the world. Overall, reading your book was an amazing experience and I look forward to read more of your work."
