What is your opinion?
Outstanding Start!
"You make no secret of the Matrix influence here! Absolutely entranced by the first couple of chapters; this definitely will be a page-turner no doubt! Love how you established the mood and how you made the characters so relatable, and I especially was intrigued by how you clued the reader into Lexi's mind. A few suggestions going forward; I would try to condense the chapters a little bit, and it would definitely benefit from an edit; I noticed a lot of grammatical mistakes such as missing periods, commas, etc. Try prowritingaid.com; it's been a very valuable tool for me as I've composed my work. Aside from that, I would highly, highly recommend this book to scifi or adventure fans! Keep up the good work!"
Intriguing Start
"I loved the first chapter. Offers up so many questions making you want to keep reading. The others were a great followup too! Can't wait for the next upload!"
Intrigued and hooked !!!
"Cover and title drew me and what a great read!! Well written, great plot and a real page turner. Well done and keep it coming !!!"
There's a glitch in the Matrix!
"Very Red Pill / Blue Pill - but no choice was given in this case. Thrust into a new world with no rhyme or reason, the first two chapters are going to make you ache for more. "Who" is coming? And "What" is going on? Great hook."
Wayne
"Good story"
Great read.
"I really loved the opening of the story. You really are off to a great start. The plot seems so interesting that I am eager for the next update. However, I did notice that your sentences are super long. Some of them are entire paragraphs and that can discourage the reader. I'd advise you to vary your sentence lengths. Also, I noticed a few grammar and punctuation errors, but as this is an ongoing novel I assume you would get to the editing once your draft is finished. Overall, I'm impressed and I would love to see more of your work."
