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"Mooooreeeeee please!!!!! ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️"
Amazing
"I love itttt pleaseeee continue "
Really enjoying the novel so far!
"I’m really enjoying the writing style and the plot of this novel. I’m excited to see how this all plays out."
Worth Reading
"The plot itself is very interesting. I enjoy The perspective of the Protagonist a lot. I also like the environment of the society. Sasha's friends, her goals, and the whole aura of Sasha's world give a sense of normalcy which I love and missed(I am a non-stop fantasy reader at the moment). The characters are also quite engaging. The way Sasha still isn't over Aiden and Aiden's dislike towards her creating an interesting read. I am very eager to know what Sasha has done. Sasha is quite likable. As for Aiden, he is still an enigma for me. I've read about 3 chapters of Abstract Worth (A very cool and compelling Title, might I add) and I can't figure out how I feel about him. I am very curious to know why Sasha likes him so much. I like your dialogues the most and the suggestion I have is to work on more descriptive writing. And You could also reduce space between the paragraphs. You could also work on the grammar a bit. A little editing can fix that. All in all, you are a good writer and I really like this book. Can't wait for more."
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"I wish there were different POVs "
Good slice-of-life novel
"Writing slice-of-life style romance is very tricky to pull off because a lot of the tension is inevitably going to be internal, so the characters and plot must be compelling in order to keep the reader's interest. In this respect, you've done very well. I empathised with the emotions of your protagonist and I truly got the sense that could be a description of a real life high school relationship, drama and all. The implication that Sasha is not so innocent in what occurred between her and Aiden also makes me understand his point of view, and it makes me want to know more about how she angered him. So overall I would say you have done a great job so far of building suspense and drama, and I'm curious to see how it ends. The only thing I would say is that there were some grammatical issues and awkwardly worded sentences, but those can be cleaned up by editing your chapters, and it doesn't take away from the story. Just try to do a little more proofreading in the future. You are a very good writer and I love your use of metaphors to describe feelings, it just needs a little bit of polishing. Other than that though, it's a an interesting and engaging story so far. I look forward to seeing where it goes. Well done!"
INTERESTING!!
"The story starts out and we get a glimpse into Sasha's daily life, her friends, her relations, her uni etc. It's all very normal and cool and the atmosphere is playful but fun. It's also interesting, because we get a lot about the people around her, and that makes her more real to the reader's eye. The plot idea is fantastic, just like the title itself. I've only read two chapters of this and that's all we have so far, but it's interesting how things are developing so far! Aiden and his girlfriend breaking up, her still having feelings for him, him hating her (which we don't know the cause behind. makes it more curious) !! It's realistic and fun to read, so I recommend more people check this out! The plot will only be thickening from now onwards. However, I have a few pieces of advice for you! Firstly, I'd recommend that you check your grammar and spelling, because it could really interfere with the flow of the story and interrupt the reader's experience. I suggest getting Grammarly, it really helped me a lot too. Secondly, I think the spacing is too wide, you could try to lessen the gaps a bit. And maybe work on your descriptive writing? I believe that including bits and bops to paint a setting will depict a better picture for your story. So far, it's good, I can't wait to see where this will go!"
Has Potential
"I read over the story a few times because I had a really hard time getting into the novel itself. There are a lot of characters that seem to pop in and out of the story at random, and often, brief times that unfortunately, make them forgettable. Because of this, I had to stop and go back to see how the characters were related to each other as I kept getting confused of who was friends with who. I think the concept of the plot is fairly interesting. I haven't read very many books where it starts off with a couple who has broken up and then finds themselves together again. I thought that was rather charming! I think the main characters, Aiden and Sasha, are likable and believable as far as young romances go. However, as I previously mentioned, there are a lot of side characters that don't add much to the plot line and I would even go as far as to say, they take away from the story. While it's good to show your characters have friends around, unless they're essential to driving the plot forward, I would suggest taking some of them away. I think the story moves along at a good pace and I like the length of your chapters. However, some of your chapters frequently incorporate the "time lapse" technique when I think it would flow better to go throughout the character's day without employing it. Time lapsing can sometimes disrupt the flow by pulling the reader out of a scene abruptly. I also noticed that at certain points, the story would switch between 1st and 3rd person which also caught me off guard, disrupting the flow. Be careful of this and try to keep it to one POV. Also, I saw places that could be improved where there was a lot of passive writing. For example, in one of the chapters you kept writing, "Sasha began to walk..." This is considered passive when you could simply say, "Sasha walked..." which is more active. There was slight repetitiveness in certain areas and a few other grammatical errors that can be rectified during the editing process. You could try using Grammarly or another editing tool to help you. I use Grammarly for my own writing. I hope this review helps you!"
