What is your opinion?
Justify
"Hey guys! Just released my first book! Come on and check it out! It's a book about a girl who falls into a permanent coma before she could do everything she wanted."
Regrets
"Great start! Right from the beginning, I could really hear the character's voice and see their personality. There’s some great groundwork for future chapters, and the writing is full of emotion. Maybe add some more details, though, especially in the flashbacks. Some of the scenes so far seem to move very quickly. Nevertheless, the majority of the story so far – the thoughts – show more than enough potential. I’d definitely be interested in seeing what happens next!"
Regrets
"It has an interesting concept/perspective but I feel like we are kind of being thrown into the deep end going from her being in a coma in the first chapter to her first job experience in the second and third. Maybe you're trying to backtrack and provide context, but you could in fact tell the story backward instead, you start with her in the coma and go back bit by bit from it so we understand how she got here, you may also be doing this, it's hard to judge with three chapters. Maybe you could physically describe the places and people more so we can get a sense of what these things look like, you say the uniform was short, I understand what you are going for, but what color? Does it have frills? How much skin does it show? This can show us it's short and that she's uncomfortable in it rather than you telling us that it's just short. I also find your chapters and paragraphs short. Keep up the good writing."
Justify
"The story has an interesting story line, quite emotive. Just a couple of grammar mistakes and restructuring that needs to be looked into. Good luck and best wishes, Shobana"
Interesting story
"Your story is quite interesting. I love the way you write your story just like how the main character express his feelings. I could feel the sadness as I read the story. Please update soon and keep the good work"
