What is your opinion?
Interesting start
"The beginning of the story is great. The flow of the story is quite good as well. As this is still the beginning of the story, I am waiting for more chapter ; ] -Sanu-"
On the outside
"So far a great start to what will be a great book. I for one think it's very well written and I'm interested to see where you take your characters."
Intirguing
"The author was able to make this intriguing and mysterious. I'm a fan of mystery and the author nailed it I'm introguied to know more. Overall the story has potential I expect future twist and turns and awesome development. The title and so far what I read leaves you wanting to know more. Really creative so Kudos to the author. Keep it up!"
On the outside
"Interesting start.....eagerly waiting for the story to begin. 🤗🤗"
Great Prologue
"The moment you chose for the opening is great. Readers would automatically felt the danger the main character was facing, although her snarky remarks made it less scary. I think if you tone down the sarcasm and write more about the danger, it would be better, unless that is intentional. I like how you used the "flick flick flick" to build the frustration. Maybe more description about the place she was at would be good. You missed some commas and full stops along the paragraphs. The first sentence in the first long paragraph will make more sense with a comma. You also missed commas or full stops in some quotations. A quick editing will fix that. Overall, the prologue made me curious enough and it is a good way to introduce us to the universe. I know this is not much, but I do enjoy the prologue. Regards, Kei Angelus"
