What is your opinion?
Obsessed
"First things first, I love your writing style! It kept me hooked from the very beginning and I think you've described everything almost very well, apart from a few grammar mistakes, but trust me, I don't think it's a big deal! I think it would be better if some paragraphs were shorter to help the readers engage in your writing better but apart from that I don't really see anything wrong. It's perfect. Amazing work and do keep it up!"
Great start!
"I’m liking this so far! I like the twist on the cliche of being attracted to the ‘bad boy’ by having the protagonist be male. Gives a bit of diversity to the genre as opposed to most romance novels being very heteronormative, so props to you for that, we love diversity :D I noticed a few grammar mishaps here and there, my main piece of advice is to make sure you lead with a capital letter at the beginning of speech, since it’s technically a new sentence. Overall I really enjoyed this story so far! Great job! :) "
I love it!
"When I first read the plot, I was a bit worried given that I don't usually read many high school-type books. But I actually love it! It's a very simple, not at all pretentious read, and the story totally gets its message across. I'd recommend this to people who like books like "The Princess Diaries". Very fun and easy. The only note I have is that there are some problems with technical writing, like capitalization and punctuation. Other than that, it's awesome! Breezy and fun!"
🤩😌
"Hey!!!! What a start ❤️. I really like the plot and construction of your story!!!! And the sarcasm is like the cherry on the top. However, there are few grammatical mistake, which can easily be fixed :) ! Great work 💕💕. I can’t wait for the next chapter "
It's really intriguing
"I like how the writer laid out the intro and gave a sense is suspense and tension to the starting of the novel. While it's only two chapters so far I cannot wait for more and I hope they come really soon. Also Harley seems like a hottie and I don't blame Jake at all for his obsession."
Fantastic start...
"Wow, you really have a great opener here. I enjoyed reading the first few chapters that you have and I am excited to see what will happen next. I love the chapter titles, it's something I've always wanted to do in my work but never managed to do it. I like the characters a lot, especially the sarcasm they bring to the table. This helped me relate to the characters easier - I have a dark sense of humour. I very much loved the reference at the bottom of the third chapter. It made me laugh. However, the winky face is grammatically incorrect. In this instance, you can break up a line of speech to show an action by saying something like: "I can paint you like a French girl, Jack," He winked suggestively. "Or should I say Jake?" Just a couple of tips for improvement would be: 1) The descriptions need a little fine tuning to improve the flow and pace of the story. 2) There are some grammar errors with capitalisation, full stops and commas in the wrong places instead of stand alone sentences. However, other than that, I think you have real potential for this book and I would be interested to read any further updates. I hope I helped x"
