What is your opinion?
Frostbite
"I absolutely LOVE this story! It's has just enough cliff hangers to make me want to continue reading on, and the main character Jake is so hard not to love. The characters personalities are solid and written very well. The author of this story definitely has a creative imagination and has the power to make the reader envision what they are writing. I can't wait to follow this story as it continues moving along!"
Early Draft
"First of all, the story is very interesting. The chapters are fast-paced and filled with action, which makes you forget about the time as you read. The humor of the main character, Jake, lightens the seriousness of the situation, which makes for a good break along the action. As for the criticism… Some of the paragraphs are too long, which makes it almost daunting to read on. For instance, the entire chapter 2 consists of a single solid paragraph. I would suggest the author to break into a new paragraph every time a new character speaks and to separate the action itself into more paragraphs to make for a more pleasant reading experience. There are also several grammatical mistakes, especially in the beginning chapters, which makes me assume that this is an early version of the draft. A thrall edit would definitely do the story good. My suggestion to the author would also be to dial down on the exclamation points. Almost half of the dialogue ends with an exclamation point, which is very distracting for the reader. There are other ways to indicate that a character is shouting, like dialogue tags and action beats. In conclusion, the story is definitely interesting, but it could use a good edit."
Work In Progress
"I hesitate to review stories that are obviously incomplete, but the author asked for reviews... There is a lot of potential here; I like a good, fast-moving adventure and the author is definitely aiming for one. There were enough grammatical problems, though, that I just couldn't get deeply into the story. I assume this is an early draft and such will be addressed, however. Can't wait to see this when it's finished, edited and tightened! Go Jake!"
