What is your opinion?
WOW
"I am impressed with this novel. I love the plot and I really got hooked on the first chapter. It's amazing."
Interesting start!
"Thank you for reviewing my story, and I apologise that I have only just gotten around to reviewing yours! I'm quite intrigued by the mention of reincarnation during the introduction of your story. I'm both excited and curious to know how reincarnation will play into this story, and how the plot becomes more clear as the story progresses. You are amazing at describing your characters, and the features that they behold, I could picture them perfectly, and I believe you portrayed them well. Unfortunately, I found you had rather long chapters which put me off slightly; I feel as if these paragraphs need to be a bit more spaced out. Failure to space out said paragraphs will cause your readers to get bored and tired of not being able to have a small break. There were a few errors with your grammar, and I'm not completely sure if you had a proofreader before publishing your first two chapters. If you didn't, may I recommend having one? Proofreaders are amazing, and they are extremely helpful. Finally, I felt as if your second chapter ended abruptly, and that it wasn't actually finished. I'm just curious whether this is actually the case? Apart from that, I really look forward to reading your story as it progresses!"
Shadows of the Past
"Before everything, excuse me if I sound harsh because I tend to be thorough and honest in my reviews. Since it's only the first chapter, I don't think reviewing the story right away will do it justice. Firstly, the plot is amazing, and I like how all the events through the day finally got Layla to come across the person who's the reason of her dreams. I love the character's description, but I think it's too much. I don't know if it's your purpose to let the readers take a good look upon your story from the very first chapter, but I think telling everything about a character in one go is a heavy matter. I think the character's description and traits and anything you mentioned about them can be regularly mentioned through out the story. The only thing I felt uncomfortable about is mentioning religion. It's not preferable to talk about it. The plot is intriguing and I can't wait to know more about this mystery man. Technically, the body paragraphs are too long. You tend to mash the dialogues of more than one character together in the same paragraph, while the right thing to do is to separate them on individual lines. Don't write the dialogue in italic, andwhen tagging the dialogue, start with the character's name instead of the tag. There's small grammar mistakes that I believe can be fixed easily, and- as a future tip- don't use ? and ! together or twice, which means no ?? or !! or ?! It's definitely going to be an intriguing read, so keep writing and don't give up!!"
Great way to start!
"Even in such a short time, I find myself interested in the cast of characters, whether they’re main or supporting! The plot itself is intriguing, mysteries lay ahead and that’s always my favorite kind of story~ I can’t wait to read more! It’s always a good sign when the first chapter is exciting~ Also, love the writing, definitely got a chuckle out of me with the “either get laid or see a shrink bit” at the start!"
Great till now
"I like your story and by summary one can understand the plot. I always love stories about reincarnation and past memories. The paragraphs were a bit long. That's all and everything else was great! KEEP WRITNG!!!"
