What is your opinion?
Perfect
"This story has a nice beginning. The way she starts to plan her revenge. This book screams 'REVENGE'. Nothing to say. 'I loved it' Overall; Well done Highly recommended to all the people who loves reading revenge stories. -Sanu-"
Phenomenal characters !
"I absolutely am in love with your main character! I love the way your write her and her interal struggle with who she is and who she was raised to be. I am not normally a fan of "sold" stories but this one is so original and aboksitelg captivated me from start to finish. I honestly love the whole idea of this story is one I haven't seen before. Keep writing !! You ae doing an amazing job! "
Bring Me That Sweet Revenge!
"Plot: CHECK Characters: CHECK Conflict: CHECK Setting: CHECK Villains: CHECK Check, check, check, and check! This is an amazing concept for a story. The plot is very driven and the characters are very relatable! The supernatural theme surrounding the entire story is A-MAZING! There's a mix of supernatural, romance, fantasy, lots of steamy scenes. It's truly epic! The pacing is just right, from the first chapter all the way to the most recent. The promise the writer makes you in the first chapter is delivered every time you turn the page. The main character Jaleena is not your typical heroine and that is what makes the story even more interesting. She's a mix of emotion and a ticking time bomb. I will be very honest, not used to reading "steamy scenes" and usually its not my preference, but I did manage to read them. And they weren't awkward, which is I good thing, I guess. BUT I do have a little be of issue with the writing structure. It gets difficult to read when the dialogue of multiple characters is clustered together. It just makes readability a little hard. I'm not a grammar nazi and I won't comment on it because I feel as if you are writing with a flow. So grammar and spelling is not what turned me off, but the structure of the paragraphs. This is technical stuff and it has nothing to do with the story, it just makes your writing more presentable and easier to digust. Just needs a little editing here and there. Other than that... I'm waiting for more chapters! So please keep writing!"
Rooting for Jaleena!
"I agree with the other comments about the main character. She has a lot of fire and determination, its a great fit and very believable for the plot. As much as anxiety as the first few chapters gave me, i think you could add a little more detail. That suspense is so great before making the transition to the new storyline (trying not to add spoilers here!). Great idea and keep writing!!"
