What is your opinion?
THE GIRL IN THE LAKE
"This is a well-thought, awesome piece More grace to you."
Chilling and well written
"That was chilling and creepy, but I like the writing style. This I very well written for a short story. Great job."
Fantastic
"Disappointed with the fathers reaction not your writing, your writing is effortless and I really enjoyed reading ") "
The Girl in the Lake
"I admire the storyline and I am pretty sure it has other impressive chapters ahead. The story is coming up well but can't say much now for a chapter is not enough for me to offer the needed constructive. criticism. However, it is a good start."
Keep writing!
"I loved this short story, and the elements you added to it just made it even more creepy and suspenseful. I would have liked to see more of the fathers reaction to him finding out about his wife and daughter, but all in all 10/10!"
BRAVO!
"This short story should be turned into a complete book, What a fascinating and thrilling story with myserty and death. Wow just wow. I have to say it captures you instantly and gives you the thrills. Totally recommend this book! Kudos to you!"
Amazing read
"Even though the story is short, it keeps the reader engaged in the mystery. I liked reading it. It's amazingly written with a great plot."
Don't stop there.
"This was a good story. Truly should consider thickening it out and making it a larger story instead of one thick chapter! Like your writing is amazing but you should expand your horizons and make it bigger. Everyone including myself would love that."
Amazing
"This story's plotline was very interesting and easy to follow. The author effectively builds up suspense and clearly portrays how each character feels. I really enjoyed reading this and recommend it to anyone who is looking for a quick read."
I liked it
"The writing, suspense and mystery was good."
Mystery and Captivating
"Very good job hooking me in on chapter 1. Most people don't understand you have the first chapter to connect with your readers or even hook them. Great job. The gloves and the girls powers. A very nice touch. I really enjoyed it. Now you need to work on marketing."
The girl in the lake
"I enjoyed reading this and I know the author. "
A dark tale
"The story is short and dark, but the author doesn't need many words to suck the reader into a sad and lonely tale of death. It did a great job grabbing my attention and keeping it, but it also made me wish there was more to the story. I want more about this world."
Instantly hooked!
"You had me from the start! I loved the mystery of it. Even though it's a short story, the author made me feel like I knew the characters and was right there on the dock with them! Hoping to read more of your work, soon!"
The girl in the lake
"I loved this short story. I would like to read more. This the start of a good novel. I would recommend it to any of my friends that read"
The girl in the lake
"At first the story was all over the place and was very confusing. As the story went on I understood it. Overall it was a good story I wish I knew what happened next."
A very touching story
"Warning: there will be spoilers in this review. You have been warned. I must start off by applauding your crafting of an interesting tale, I did not want to stop reading it. It was quite the page-turner. That said there were many points where you could enlarge the story. If the narrator was gifted in psychometry at an early age she had to have come up with a way to handle it or she would be driven mad by the constant visions. Nothing like being in a restaurant and having visions of the last person who used your fork and knife, or visions of the animal that died to feed you that dinner. What about laying down on your hand-crocheted blanket and having visions of your deceased grandmother (who had made the blanket.) all night while you try to get some sleep? As for her luck with men. I think she could prepare them ahead of time with trinkets from the guy's family and gradually work up from there. If a guy had an open mind then they would probably end up accepting her "gift." Although touching corpses is pretty out there. You could write a book concerning the main character's early life while eventually having a child with the same gift. How did they figure out gloves helped? I am curious to know. As you can see there are many ways of making this short story into a novel. As an editor friend once told me this story "is in need of a sequel." Apparently, I am not the first to feel that way judging by the other reviewers have posted. If you can make a short story this good then you should be able to make a larger work without problems."
