What is your opinion?
Unexpected ending, overall really good!
"I really liked that Leah and Arlo weren't some criminal masterminds, they just wanted revenge (albeit a bit extreme). I didn't like the romance scenes, but that's only because I generally don't find romance interesting, the writing was very good except for the passages where Leah wanted to physically very painfully harm Zakai and Maddie felt kind of out of place and though I felt like the main characters only achieved things because of blind luck (I think seeing Leah come up with multiple plans and scrapping some in her head would fix this) the plot was really interesting and suspenseful. "
Very good book
"I wish i could write this good. I love every single chapter!"
I dont remember
"Very good book. Interesting, great plot twist. Can't wait to finish the book. I've started up all night too finish it"
Good
"Interesting"
My First Story
"I was really worried that I wouldn’t find a book I liked on here because I feared it would be cringy like wattpad. I made a great choice I love the intensity and complex characters!"
Nice read
"Nice read 💕 "
Very nice story
"Can you please update when is the next part coming 🥺"
Pills and broken glass
"Very interesting story ever page kept me reading till the end can't wait to see what happens next "
Loved it!
"This was the first Thriller book that I read here, since that not what I usually read. But this book was so well written that I could not stop reading it. It kept me very intrigued! Wonderful job, author! Loved it! ❤️❤️❤️"
Nice thriller
"I enjoyed all the twists and turns in this, and the ending was unexpected. Everything was a nice lead up to the surprising ending. I liked the evolution of the characters and how we learned more with each chapter. I personally felt it was a little quick for the main character to be thinking dark thoughts with such gusto. I get the momentary thinking and the high you would get from it, but I think committing to something like that would take a little more time than was in this story. There were some grammatical errors I spotted. All in all, this was definitely a nice thriller, and I wasn't able to predict what was happening, nor how secondary characters would react."
Pills and broken glass
"I never thought I’d get to the end of this story because it’s a genre I never would have picked. But I was surprised each chapter and intrigued by what Leah was going to do. The adrenaline rush comes with Leah stalking her lover and realising he is not who he is … and his fling is with his best friend n alibi’s wife 😳 Loves the way the author winds her way into my heart n mind. Brilliant ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ "
Wow very intense, the bk ended too fast...loved it...
"Thoroughly enjoyed would've loved a sequel tht ends Zakai...Thanku author..."
Approaching the storms
"Like it but some of the chapters stop opening....is agood story..keep it up "
Pills and Broken Glass
"I managed to read this in a few hours and I adored it! I loved the ending and all the twist and turns in-between! I can't wait to see if there is another book or what else you can bring to the table!"
Great read
"I really enjoyed the plot. Couldn't put it down. Great job author!"
A true thriller
"I want to start this by saying how much I hate romance, especially kinds that just don't go right. It's so easy to feel disengenous. And yet, this story was so hard to put down. It is well written, with characters that you can understand. Nothing seems too out of place, except for a few scenes if you nitpick. The story's plot takes the right amount of time to raise the stakes. Overall, even if you dislike falling apart relationships, you can still enjoy this book. It's a great read!"
OH. MY. GOD!!!!
"You're the first omniscient narrator I've read for on this platform, and I can't begin to tell how amazingly you pulled this off!! The plot is amazing, well-planned, clear with characters' motives, and full of twists and unexpected events. Until the last minute, the events were still unexpected. It took some time for the action and drama to start while Leah laid out her plan, but I really love how you threw your ordinary characters into extraordinary situations. Leah is smart and cunning and sensitive, and even manipulative. I noted that she's left-handed—left-handed are more prone to killing by the way; I don't mean anything with this, I'm left-handed too :) Zakai and Maddie deserved whatever paranoia they lived through. Arlo, oh don't get me started on poor, sweet Arlo. With each chapter, the plan became even more complicated, and I couldn't wait until Leah began executing. You seemed to understand your characters very well and they understand themselves too, and I could feel everything they went through. I loved that fluffy atmosphere between Arlo and Leah, too bad it wasn't a happy ending. Technically, I noticed random capitalization in the middle of the sentence and some non capitalized proper nouns. Also, you seem to capitalize words after using ellipses or em-dash (—) even when the thought isn't yet completed. There're two spelling mistakes (interest in chapter 4/ storey in chapter 17) and (to see if) instead of (two see if) in chapter 19. There's one verb switched to present tense in chapter 7. Regarding punctuation of dialogues: Dialogue punctuation, tags, and action beats: cases on how dialogues should be punctuated. -If the sentence is a statement: "I made coffee," he/she/they/I/my mother etc... said. (Note the comma and no capitalization) -If the sentence is a question or exclamation. "Do you want coffee?" he asked. "Wow! You look so beautiful!" he commented. - If the dialogue is followed by action beat: "I made coffee." He reached for two mugs from the cupboard (capitalization and point) For more visit https://thewritelife.com/dialogue-tags/ It's really amazing. Well-planned and well-written. It made me think that love is really unreasonable and so are human beings sometimes. I enjoyed your story to the very end!! Amazing work! :)"
Invigorating style!
"From the first chapter itself there is a hook and build up that won't let the reader go. The writing is clear, descriptive but not static. The plot will draw you in and I admire the way the author has phased things poetically or symbolically. The only difficulty I had was trying to figure out whose thoughts were the italicized texts, there should be a regular text after the first thought with a mention of she or he thought to him/herself before continuing with the thought. Otherwise, talented work."
Pills And Broken Glass
"Wow! What a brilliant writer. The way the writer describes scenes in the book really help the reader visualize what is happening. The story is well written, it flows nicely, and it makes you want to keep reading to find out more. Loved it."
THE THRILL GIRL! THE THRILL
"Where do I even begin without ruining it for the rest to read!! This is a must read! I love it! THE THRILL! I hope you submit this in the contest because this was absolutely amazing! I was all in, invested and everything! Leah!! LEAH LEAH!! Oh I was her the entire time! You really wasted no time and just pulled us right in the story. I don’t mind sometimes you just gotta do things differently and I enjoyed it very much! I had to stop commenting because lmao you’ve gotten soooooo many notifications! "
