Yiona

Great character :D

I really loved the main character! Her motivation and determination really kept this story going. Great job on that!

I would really suggest just take a break from writing and go back to edit what you have. There are a lot of grammatical errors that really just ruins the story’s flow.

But other than that, I think it was a great read. Keep it up! :)

Good start

It’s a really good start to where I’ve read so far. I especially liked the summary and how you introduced the readers to the character. She had some problems that could lead to character development and I love those kinds of plots!

Something I would suggest is to keep chapters shorter. If too many events happen at once, then for me personally I get bored and sometimes cannot keep track of them all.

But other than that, it was a great start. I’m looking forward to see more updates! :)

PS sorry for the lateness of this XD

Wonderful!!

I love all the characters!! They are so funny yet serious and also curious. You did a great job of weaving them together with the plot without overdoing the introduction. Great job!

There are a lot of grammar mistakes such as missing indents and wrong verbs that you really need to fix so it don’t ruin the story’s flow.

But other than that, I’m excited to see where this story will go!! Keep up the good work :)

Ecstatic plot!

This book is beautifully written out. I love the characters and the sweetness of the plot. Your writing style is wonderfully portrayed and I can’t wait to read more!

There are a lot of grammar mistakes such as missing indents for dialogue, and thinker description that is italicized along with the thoughts. I think you should take the time to fix this as it weighs down the flow of the story.

But other than that, I love where I am so far and it’s going great! Keep up the good work :)

Lovely

I really loved how the story began. I couldn’t even put it down!! Awesome job!! The plot is fascinating and it’s always great to read a story different from the other ones that I’ve read. The more unique the better :)

Awesome!

The beginning of this story was very captivating. I absolutely loved it. Could not put it down!! Great job!

There are some grammar mistakes but those are easy to fix with proofreading. Also, since it’s a book, I’ve seen you start a sentence with numbers. Although numbers are okay, I’m not sure if they’re suitable for starting a sentence.

But that’s all I can find. It has a great plot and I can’t wait to see where this will go!! Awesome story :)

Amazing!!!

This book is a masterpiece! I love the plot and the way the characters are experiencing dimensions. At first, I wasn’t as developed into the story but now, I’m so hooked into the story. Can’t wait till it’s completed! Keep it up!👍

Very Mysterious!

The first few chapters are very attention grabbing. It's like they know what's going on, but you don't know it; and you want to keep reading to find out. Very unique!
Also, I like how the story develop through 2 characters with a past to go off on, keeps the mystery going.
There are some minor grammar issues but that can be fixed easily. I really enjoyed reading this, keep it up!

A-mazing!!!

Wow, this story is just amazing. I loved every single second of it. The plot is great and so is the storyline. Awesome job!! There are some minor grammar errors but otherwise it’s solid! I loved it :)

Interesting Story

Ooo, the suspense... it’s a great start! I love the tension of this book.

One detail I would add is that there are some misspelled words and minor grammar mistakes.

But other than that it’s a real solid start. Keep it up!

Compelling

This was a very interesting read to say the least. I really liked the details given and the build up to the finale scene. The name of the protagonist tying to the end of the story is really cool. And I like the ending, how it leaves it to the reader to interpret. Nice job!

Nice start

It was a really fun start. I liked the way you introduced characters and plot points.

However, personally for me, I like to get to know characters by diving into the plot, not just planning stating it. Mainly because I find that boring.

But other than that, I like where it’s going. Cute romance story!

Very Interesting

First of all, I LOVE reading books XD

Second of all, I really like how you formatted ur story and the flow with it is great! It expresses very interesting ideas: was a fun read!

Very interesting

The story itself was great! I especially loved the intro. It really draws the reader in for a dive in adventure.

I can’t say that this book was something that I usually read but I could tell the author did a great job of plotting out this story. And also, just great editing so no grammar mistakes. Keep up the good work!

Masterpiece

Usually, I don’t develop into werewolves stories that much but this one was a masterpiece. I am in love with your characters, yes even the alpha and his cockiness. Sonia is a strong woman who wants to be independent. I am in awe😍

There isn’t really anything to criticize as it’s pretty much perfect. With the great intro of the plot and the characters.

Wished it was longer though but a good ending overall :)

Awesome Characters!

I just have to say, you created amazing characters! They are flowing with the plot beautifully and I can already sense character development that will lead to a wonderful conclusion.

I’m not going to say much about your grammar because it’s already being edited by your editor :)

One thing I do have to bring up is that your paragraphs and chapters are a bit too long for my liking. Since your story isn’t like full on action, it’s hard to keep me entertained through that long scrolling. But other than that, I think the story itself is great! You really did a good job. Keep up the great work!! :)

Awesome!

I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. I love Eris's determination of her goal to achieve a better life. She dreamed of her future and a better life to escape her current one. I like how you woven the plot into the action and the description.

There are some minor grammar mistakes that I think a little proofreading would fix. And another reason I'm scoring this as a 4 is that there wasn't as much action description that I had hoped there would be. But it still kept me entertained! Great job!! :)

Engaging

I like the way you portrayed the characters. I love Will even with his negative traits of selfishness. And Chantel I could sense some future character development. I hope XD

What I like to see more is some cliff hangers. I think that's just what's missing from the story. Since there isn't a lot of action going on, you should probably consider some of those to keep your readers hooked. There are also some little grammar mistakes but those are easy to fix.

Other than that, I really like the sweetness of the plot. Keep up the great work!

Interesting...

I like how you started off the story with a little background to let us know the characters better. Your writing style fits perfectly with the structure of the book, great job!!

However, I think there should be more action in the plot. Or maybe I haven't gotten there yet. From what I'm up to, it's hard to stay involved with the story if it's just describing the ordinary school life. I'm waiting for some DRAMA XD

Buuuut, other than that, I think I would definitely give this story a try and see what it will lead to! And btw, I hate everyone at her school XD

But keep up the good work! :D

Couldn't put it down

I love the story! It's very interesting with a plot to go off with and the smut that flows beside it. Great job! I could not put it down!

It's an awesome story! Keep it up :D

There really isn't much to say except this story is excellent at pulling people in.

Pretty Interesting

The story itself has a really cool backstory to go along with the plot. You did a fabulous job of describing and narrating that!

However, I don't think this story is my cup of tea. I couldn't really stay with it even with the good cliffhangers. But I can tell that you did a great job writing this. Love your writing style. Great job! :D

Creepy.

An interesting start to the beginning of the story I must say. The setting was beautifully narrated out and I love the way you introduced the characters by weaving them together all into one movie rumor or myth or I don't even know XD Great job!

I would say probably cut some of your paragraphs in half. Sometimes, it's just one big dialogue and when I read that, it feels like the character isn't taking a breath. Most of them are fine, there are just a selected few. And there are some missing indents when the character speaks but that's all. It was very suspenseful to read and I really enjoyed it :)

Keep up the good work!

Absolutely Amazing!

First, I just gotta say, I love your writing style, your characters, and everything about this book!! The details are very flowy and neatly planned out. The scene and setting and suspense behind it all is just keeping me going and going. Congratulations! Wonderful job!

The only problem I could find is that there are some little tiny grammar mistakes such as missing indents. But other than that, OMG I will keep on reading this! It's sooo good :D

Great Story!

I think it's a beautifully narrated out story. Your writing style is very unique and flows with the plot really well! I love your characters and they are so adorable and funny yet strange at the same time. Keeps the excitement going!

I would suggest adding more description, that was something that I didn't see a lot of with the setting for example. Also, there are some little grammar mistakes that could be easily fixed with proofreading. But other than that, it's a great book to where I am now. Keep up the great work!! :D

Interesting Start

The summary was very captivating and I’m loving the characters so far. Keep up the good work!

However, I think you may have overly put down the plot introduction. I get that you may feel like you need to set the setting and let us know about the environment the character is in but don’t overdo it. I would suggest weaving these kind of things into the plot itself. Basically, I’m just not seeing too much action here.

But other than that, I believe it will develop into something great! I will keep reading :)

King Trials

I really liked this story and how the plot unfolds itself. Your writing style is beautiful and elegant that flows with the story perfectly. Keep it up! :)

Interesting Start

The summary was actually very grabbing. It was a great logline that you created! :D The plot is not quite unfolded yet because there isn't too many chapters, but I think it'll get real interesting once Issac comes in XD

However, I believe you should take some time and edit through these chapters as they are full of little grammatical errors. I think some here and there is fine, but too many can be distracting. Since there's only 2 chapters, one proofread shouldn't be too much time :)

Other than that, I think it's a great start to a great story! Keep up the good work :)

Biters

This story really had me hooked through it. I love how easily the plot flows with each character and hating the Baron but loving the story :D

There are some grammar issues that need fixing. And I would just suggest adding descriptions more often than plot. It’s very adventurous but I can’t quite picture what the setting looks like.

But other than that, it’s a great story. Liking where it’s going :) Keep it up!

A-mazing!!

This book was one of the best werewolf stories I’ve ever read!! I loved it. The short chapters actually kept me going through it instead of getting bored. I absolutely adore your writing style 😄

There were some minor grammar issues but other than that, great job!! Keep up the good work :)

PS: sorry about the lateness of this review...😅

Truly inspiring

This isn’t something that I have read before. The plot is mind blowing and grabs my attention perfectly! I loved the intros of the characters and the unfolding of the plot, great job!!

I would suggest shortening your sentences to add some action into the book. Or maybe it’s because I haven’t gotten that far into it yet. Even if the descriptions are wonderfully displayed, too much and too long can be distracting.

Other than that, this book was a unique one! Keep up the good work! :)

Love it!!!

I throughly enjoyed this!! It’s very well edited and formatted nicely. The moment I read the summary, it pulled me in. Honestly, it’s pretty much perfect for chapter one! Keep up the good work, I’ll definitely be adding this to my continue list :)

Awesome!!

There was a great introduction to the characters without too much narration. That was awesome! As soon as that trio entered, I couldn’t stop reading. It just got better! Great job!!

There are a lot of little grammar mistakes that need fixing and I’ve been finding them all over the place. I suggest doing some chapter checks every once in a while.

But other than that, it was a really fun read! I’ll definitely be adding this to my continue list :)

Nice start!

First, I just gotta say, the characters seem great and the introductions were pretty interesting to say the least. They were well narrated, good job!!

However, I also have to add that the introductions may have been too much. As to say, the readers can figure out the characters as the plot moves on. For me personally, it’s hard to keep me reading this because I just don’t see where the plot is supposed to go. But maybe it’s still too early in the book.

Other than that, a proofread for this book and it’ll be a great start! Keep up the good work!! :)

Loving it!!

It was great! I love the plot sooo much!! It’s beautifully narrated and the characters are like able, except maybe Victor...MAYBE XD

There were some minor grammar issues but other than that, perfect to where I’ve been so far! I’ll definitely keep reading this :) Awesome job!!

Beautifully narrated

I loved the beginning of this story and how it set the theme for the next chapters. You’re writing style if beautiful and the narration is wonderfully done. I’ll probably like it more once the paragraphs styles and grammar has been fixed. But overall, keep up the good work!!

Short and Sweet

Although I have never seen a book with such introductions, I can say it’s pretty unique and I liked it :)

There are a lot minor grammar issues. I suggest proofreading so it’ll make the overall story better. I liked how each sentence got to the point straight away. It was short, sweet, and forward. Great job!!

Wonderful start!

Although I didn’t get to read the rest of this book, it was probably one of the best chapter starts I’ve ever read! Great job!

There are a couple of run-on sentences and missing spaces that needs to be fixed; but other than that, awesome start! Good luck on the sales! :)

Nice start

Well, the start was interesting. I like your character’s sassyness😂

One thing I would add is that try using double quotes and indents more so it’s easier to read. The chapters are also a little too short for my liking. But other than that, I’d like to see what will happen with these two XD Good job!

Touch less

The beginning was certainly captivating. I like the style of how you wrote this. The plot is nice and easy to catch on, I liked the sweetness and sassy ness of it😂 Keep up the good work!

The One they Left Behind

I really enjoyed reading this. Keep up the good work! I do wish to see some more character development and plot but maybe it’s because I haven’t gotten as far.

But other than that, it’s a great piece of work! Awesome job! :)

Nice Introductions

I really liked the summary and the prologue. The introductions were nicely done. I’m liking each of your characters. Good job!

However, the introductions also may just be too long. I would suggest giving away some of the plot into those 4 chapters due to the fact that there’s no action...therefore, not as interesting.

But other than that, it was an enjoyable read. Keep up the good work!

A Restart

I like where the story is going so far. Enjoying the plot and loving the characters😍❤️

I would suggest putting some time into editing as there are a lot of grammar mistakes. And I saw that it got better as the chapters went on.

Other than that, great job!! Can’t wait to read more :)

Awesome start!!

This was definitely an interesting read. The grammar looks good and the plot is off to a solid start, can’t wait to see where this will go!

This is just me but I don’t like a story that begins with background. I like to figure out that by either characters or narration. And the plot was kinda confusing in chapter 2. Or maybe I’m just slow XD

But other than that, it’s a great start and I’m looking forward to see how this story will develop :) Great job!!

Awesome!

Well, I gotta say, this was something I haven’t read before. A cocky jerk because someone took the spot of a swim team? Damn XD

I love how quick pace the plot is and each character, well, maybe except Alexander...for now. :)There are some minor grammar errors but other than that, it was quite an enjoyable read!! Keep up the good work!!

Cute, Short, and Sweet

I really enjoyed reading this. Love the descriptions of each sentence, each character. Great job!!

There are some minor grammar errors but other than that, it’s a great story. Cute, short, and sweet. I liked how the characters were interacting with each other. Keep it up!! :)

Great!!

Great read!! Love where it’s going so far :) Totally recommend it. Keep up the good work!!

Interesting read...

Wow. The beginning of the book completely caught my attention. I liked how the plot was unveiling itself. It was fanning out perfectly. Great job!!

One thing I would add is that from chapter 5 back, the paragraphs are very smushed. It makes it hard for me to read so I would suggest formatting like how you did with chapter 6.

Other than that, it’s a solid story. I’d love to keep reading. Keep up the good work!

Nicely done!

This was an interesting read. The poetic part was very touching and emotional. I like it :)

Keep up the good work!

Awesome!!

This book was definitely an interesting read. At the beginning there wasn’t as much plot included into it but as the timeline goes on, it only got better and better. Great job!!

There are some minor grammar mistakes that a easy proofread will fix. Otherwise, it’s a great book with a sense of humor twisted into romance and suspense. Keep it up!

Nice start!

I gotta say, this story definitely has a kind of twist into it. It has just the right amount of action blended in with suspense and romance. Loved it :)

I was a little confused about when her flashbacks were occurring and when the real story was going. The signal is somewhat unclear. Also, there are a lot of extra spaces that are not needed in this story. But that's just a little problem.

Anyways, great job! I can't wait to see where this will go :)

Awesome Start!

I loved the way you twisted destiny into this story. The plot and the development of this story is simply amazing! Great job! I'd love to see the two develop together :)

One thing I would add is that, there are not a lot of description in this book, or at least the start. I would suggest adding the setting (school, campus...etc.).

But other than that, great job! I'd love to keep reading :)

Interesting start

I’ve only read the first few chapters and I gotta say it’s a great start! I especially loved the prologue!

One thing I would add is that this story is a little overly descriptive. It’s more like a narrative and essay of some kind rather than a story. I would suggest to add more emotional description rather than setting description. More interactions with the characters.

Other than that, it’s a solid start. Keep it up!

The Scarlet Demon

This was a very well written book. I enjoyed reading it. I don't know much about Egyptian history but I can say that this book has some research put into it and I admire the effort! Keep it up!

There were a couple of minor grammatical errors but that can be fixed easily. The plot was sort of unclear to where I'm reading because I'm unsure what her main purpose is. But I'm willing to continue to see where that will go :)

Anyways, great job! And love your writing style, it's descriptive, vivid, and unique.

Great start!!

This is definitely an interesting read. I like how the characters are developing with one another as the story progresses.

You say English is not your first language and I’m impressed with this book! It’s well written! Two things I would add: there are some missing spaces and extra indents in the story. Another thing is that try adding indents and quotation marks when the characters are talking.

Other than that, I really enjoyed reading this story. I like where this is going😁 Keep up the good work!!

Great Start!

I thought the plot was really cool. I love the action from every single chapter. Keep it up!

Two thing I would add is that the background is somewhat unclear; The beginning of the story had me confused. Another thing is the grammar. I’m unsure about the commas after the dialogue.

Overall, it’s a great start to an adventurous story. Good job!

Broken Heart and Other Poems

I haven’t read anything like this before and I gotta say, it’s really well written. The emotions and feelings of each poem are very well expressed. Good job!

Gasp*

That was an interesting read...😨

I wonder if that box is something similar to Pandora’s box. From what I can see, it’s a great start! I wonder what’s going to happen with the four of them. The balance of the plot and suspense is great! Keep it up!

Great story!

This book is very well written, especially if you’re a fantasy fan. I would totally recommend it.

I loved how the sole mission of this book ties to the humor, keeps it serious but funny at the same time.

Also, the quotes really set the mood for each chapter, they’re well chosen and unique. Awesome job!!

Awesome!!

I loved it!! Can’t say anything but loving where the story is going. The descriptions are vivid and clear; and your writing style is awesome! I love seeing character developments little by little each chapter, easing its way in. Makes me want to keep reading and find out where this relationship is going :)

One thing I would add is that there are some minor grammar problems like missing commas and extra spaces but otherwise it’s a solid story. I can’t wait until it’s completed!! Awesome job!

Our Cycle

Wow, this story was breathtaking. I loved the poetic lines of it and the dialogues of the two lovers. It's so innocent and sweet. Your writing style is terrific. I love it, can't wait to read more!

Silent Noise

I'm liking it so far. The descriptions are very vivid and beautifully narrated out. They are short, sweet, and easy to understand. Great job on that.

I think the plot could have more twists and turns, however. Or maybe it's because I haven't gotten as far but I believe I can predict or at least have an idea of what's eventually going to happen. Doesn't make the story quite as exciting. And also, there are a lot of minor grammatical errors that slow down the pace of the story because I'm always aware of those in my books and while I read.

But other than that, I can sense character development! Keep up the good work :)