Paola Vázquez Droz

Rice Lake, WI

Writer of short stories and fantasy books, Dreams of becoming one of the authors in the best selling lists.

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Needs work

The story needs work. The plot needs a bit of reshaping as well as the grammar. But once organized and correctly written, I know it's gonna rock. 😊

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Interesting

I really liked it, but would have enjoyed it more if the plot was more extensive. But overall, really good job.

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Interesting

The story pulled me in. I wanted to know more about the main character as well as the rest of the supporting characters. It surprised me that the title is misleading because I thought she would have more than one love in her life, but it turned out to only be Robert. The other fact that surprised me, even more, is that I never picture this story being a teenage pregnancy drama. And even though some scenes could use work, you showed some of the stress a teenage pregnancy carries.

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Potential

This story has really good potential to turn to something amazing. It still needs a lot of work in the grammar as well as in the plot. I would love to know what happens next.

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Potential

I like the story so far, there are a few grammatical errors but they can be fixed easily. What has me confused is the fact that you mention a pack, but don't mention any wolves. It has me intrigued to know what happens next.

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Potential

This story has potential. Some parts read as they come from a videogame but is not that bad. the grammar needs a bit of help as well ad the development of the plot. Still, I feel like this can be made into a great story.

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Love it!

Everything you write reflects the passion and skill you possess. I'm amazed by every single chapter and how your plot seems to develop better every time. I'm entranced by your writing styles and your characters. (I'm still torn between Micah and Gage XD)
Keep up the work!

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Needs work

There is not a clear plot to this story. I don't even know if it should be called a story. It feels like it is more a diary, a journal than a fictional or non fiction book/short story. Still, I think with a little work and better grammar this prose can become something interesting. ☺️

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Good start

The book has a pretty good start, but the writing needs a bit of work. Keep it up though 👌

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Amazing!

Purely amazing! I can't wait for the next chapter. The way it is written and how it takes the reader by the hand through every scene it's spectacular.

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Rare

The story has a good plot so far. I'm eager to know where it leads. The writing could use some work, but is very minimal. Best of luck!

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Amazing!

The plot of the story has the reader hooked. I really liked it and believe you are a great writer.

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Amazing!

I love every single story you write. You're a great writer. Love it!!!

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Amazing

It's truly magical. I just wish I had half the talent you have. Live it!

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Thoughts

This was not what I expected when I read the title. It is very different from other writings I've read where there's a Master and Submissive. Still, I find myself enjoying the story.

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Creepypasta

I'm liking the story, but is different. The writer is always speaking to the audience, the character seems to know that he has an audience.

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