The story has a few grammatical errors in some of the chapters. I found that the use of metaphors and imagery helps in some circumstances, but having to many too often, takes a bit of the writing away. One mistake I noticed, in the beginning, is that when the characters reached the lake, Jay smelled the salty water, but lakes are made of freshwater. It is not an important detail but is something that I noticed.
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Besides that, I found this story to be different. I'm used to reading about werewolves and vampires being the good guys, when here that is not the case. Also, the protagonist has such a tragic and scarred past, that I understand the quick acceptance of this fantasy world she has been thrown into. What I did not expect were the arousing and affectionate emotions the prince brought to her because not too long ago she was being raped. That- in my opinion, it does not mean that you should change it- wasn't expected.