Paola Vázquez Droz

Rice Lake, WI

Writer of short stories and fantasy books, Dreams of becoming one of the authors in the best selling lists.

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Promising

The story holds great promise. There are a few grammatical errors that once fixed the story will flow even better. The plot needs a tiny little bit of work, but nothing major. Overall is a nice story to read and I'm looking forward to see where it leads.

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Fantastopia

Not a bad story. The grammar and punctuation need work and the plot a little shaping, but the story has potential. Keep up the good work!

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Potential

This story has really good potential to turn to something amazing. It still needs a lot of work in the grammar as well as in the plot. I would love to know what happens next.

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Interesting

I really liked it, but would have enjoyed it more if the plot was more extensive. But overall, really good job.

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Better

The story is much more clearer than the first draft. Even if there are still some confusing grammatical errors that hinder the reading experience, the story has a comfortable flow. There are more character descriptions and scenes clearly depicted. I can't wait to see what happens next.
Good luck!

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Promising

The story is interesting and intriguing. It has a marvelous unique touch, as I've told you before, being a wolf sotry with African American plus a Hispanic. That fact makes me enjoy it even more being a Latina myself. Furthermore, there are some minimal grammatical errors that if fixed, will make the story flow even better.
Keep up the amazing work and good luck!

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High potential

The story is amazing and this is only the beginning. The plot is developed nicely and the sotry hooks the reader on without difficulty. The are minimal grammar errors, but they don't make the reading difficult. Overall, I'm looking forward to what comes next.
Good luck!

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Peculiar

The story doesn't have a bad start. I would be nice though, to see more character descriptions and some background story for them. Another suggestion would be a setting description because I had a hard time imagining what was the character in. But it is not a bad story since it is only beginning.

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Very good

The story is thrillingly good and I can't wait to keep reading more of it.
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Surprised

This story was a huge surprise to me. I really didn't expect to be reading a guy-on-guy book. I've always preferred lesbian erotica (even if I'm not a lesbian). But I can say that I really enjoyed the few erotica scenes in the book.
Also, I never would had imagined that there was going to be incest. Yes, the blurb said about it, but I never expected it. The incest was midly disturbing, but it gave the story a twist all in itself.
It is not heavily baldly written, but there are some grammatical errors that once fixed it will make the reading a lot easier.
Overall, I actually enjoyed the story and can't wait to read more from you.
Good luck!

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Entertaining

The second story is amazing. It picks up well where the first ended and keeps the reader engaged. I hope that you will update soon.

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Interesting

I really like the story so far. It is a great mixture of action and fantasy. I'm really looking forward what comes next.

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Potential

I like the story so far, there are a few grammatical errors but they can be fixed easily. What has me confused is the fact that you mention a pack, but don't mention any wolves. It has me intrigued to know what happens next.

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Potential

This story has potential. Some parts read as they come from a videogame but is not that bad. the grammar needs a bit of help as well ad the development of the plot. Still, I feel like this can be made into a great story.

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Needs work

There is not a clear plot to this story. I don't even know if it should be called a story. It feels like it is more a diary, a journal than a fictional or non fiction book/short story. Still, I think with a little work and better grammar this prose can become something interesting. ☺️

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Good start

The book has a pretty good start, but the writing needs a bit of work. Keep it up though 👌

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Rare

The story has a good plot so far. I'm eager to know where it leads. The writing could use some work, but is very minimal. Best of luck!

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Amazing!

The plot of the story has the reader hooked. I really liked it and believe you are a great writer.

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Amazing!

I love every single story you write. You're a great writer. Love it!!!

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Amazing

It's truly magical. I just wish I had half the talent you have. Live it!

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Thoughts

This was not what I expected when I read the title. It is very different from other writings I've read where there's a Master and Submissive. Still, I find myself enjoying the story.

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Creepypasta

I'm liking the story, but is different. The writer is always speaking to the audience, the character seems to know that he has an audience.

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