TheJaeger

I love it

That’s a strength of yours, the way you make us feel inside the narrator instead of simply pondering it. Yours feels more alive since you invested more in the environment and I focused more in the character. I commend, there were 3 things that caught me off guard. I want to do this more with you, to write and rendition. :)

Splendid Grammir.

The author of this story sounds like she's struggling, she sounds like she deserves love, comfort, therapy, and an industry-grade life-sized Christmas ice maker. I hope she's got somebody to tell her she's a beautiful, great, loyal girl, who's fun to be around, I know she has a boyfriend, she's too wonderful to be single, I hope her boyfriend tells her how beautiful and not fat she is, I might even steal her. 10/10 author 10/10 grammir I just met you, and this is crazy, here's my number, so call me maybe. 401-526-8989

You've done well

Clearly expressed thoughts and emotions, I was expecting a story, but this is adorable, there's to be more, a chapter 2. Bravo.

👏👏👏

This story is unique and tasty, it felt suspenseful, and the plot is creative.