Chapter 1
Morning came slowly over the hills, first as a gray awareness, then a brightening in the east. As the light spread, it cast deep shadows on the undulating fairways of Footes Creek Golf Course, then glimmered on the ripples of water near the 17th green.
When the sun finally rounded the last hill above the course, its bright rays worked down past the old stone clubhouse, eased across the sloping 14th fairway, then fell on a body.
What was left of Carlos Rodriguez lay sprawled and obscene in the thick grass.A horsefly with a shiny blue-green body and silver fanning wings flew across Carlos’ face and landed lightly on his mangled chest.A cricket scurried away from a stream of congealed blood that had flowed down the steep hillside.
A small utility cart approached from the far side of the hill with two men in it.The cart stopped and the shorter man pointed up the hill, then buried his head in his hands, his shoulders shaking.
The tall lean man jumped out, ran thirty paces up the hill and stopped.
“Oh, my God,” he whispered, then turned away with his hand over his mouth.
Hi ElsaBonstein,
I just finished reading your story Footes Creek and I loved it so much. Your writing is immersive and cinematic.I could really picture each scene unfolding on the page.
I was especially drawn to the eerie opening in Chapter 1 where the light spreads across the lush fairways to reveal the gruesome body of Carlos Rodriguez near the 14th green. The way the horsefly lands on the victim and the cricket scurries away creates both atmosphere and visual contrast perfect for a suspenseful comic panel. That slow dawn and stark horror would translate brilliantly into mood‑driven art .
As Chief McSorley trudges through the clubhouse and golf course, still haunted by grief over his late wife, the emotional weight beneath the mystery comes through so clearly. His path crossing with Abbey Mitchell her role as a member of the elite club and realtorsets up both intrigue and tension that would shine in a graphic narrative. The club’s grandeur contrasted with murder and grief feels exceptionally cinematic .
I’m a commissioned artist, and I’d love to draw your story into a comic/manga. No pressure though, I just think your work would look awesome in comic form.
You can check out some of my recent work on my DeviantArt (Username – Ev3Verse). If you’re interested, please message me on Discord (Username – Eve_verse) so we can bring your story to life visually. I’ll be waiting to hear from you!
Regards,
Evee