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Can a mysterious fallen star help Calypso come to terms with her family's past, or will they both discover more than they'd anticipated? Six years have passed since Calypso took her father's place as captain of the Neptune's Deceit after his unexpected descent into madness. Still haunted by her mother and brother's murder, one by her father's hands and the other, unwittingly, on her own, Calypso's life is changed when they pull a half-dead man from the sea. Impossible to kill and going by the name of Pisces, he instantaneously undoes everything the pirate queen had worked for. Together, they must navigate through a complex relationship forced upon them by the possession of two seemingly harmless necklaces. In the process, Calypso is forced to face the reality of her true identity and that of the stranger she brought upon her ship.
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Karin Rogowski: Gut geschrieben und beschrieben. Die Charaktere und Situationen sind stimmig und nehmen einen gefangen. Mich hat das Buch ab der ersten Zeile fasziniert, genau wie die anderen Bücher davor. Sehr guter Schreibstil und eine sehr gute Übersetzung, nebenbei bemerkt. Dankeschön, dass Du Deine Bücher ...
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Lina: Ich finde gut , das sich der Text flüssig lesen lässt, die Story leicht verständlich ist. Fülltext. Fülltext. Fülltext
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Nicole Schär: Eine tolle Geschichte, bin schon gespannt wie sie ausgeht.
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Stefanie : Manchmal irritieren die Schreibfehler aber die Geschichte ist sehr spannend und ich freue mich das ich weiter lesen kann und es sogar noch weitere Bücher gibt... Bin gespannt wie es weiter geht..
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freespirit492: J'ai adoré lire cette histoire captivante et émotionnellement touchante des personnages attachants et très bien écrite bravo à toi et merci pour le plaisir que j'ai eu à lire cette histoire!!!
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Victoria: Hi,I analyzed your work, and I think it has a very unique and engaging storytelling style. The way you present your ideas and emotions really stands out. By the way are you currently working on any other stories or writing projects?
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Victoria: Hi,I analyzed your work, and I think it has a very unique and engaging storytelling style. The way you present your ideas and emotions really stands out. By the way are you currently working on any other stories or writing projects?
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Victoria: Hi,I analyzed your work, and I think it has a very unique and engaging storytelling style. The way you present your ideas and emotions really stands out. By the way are you currently working on any other stories or writing projects?
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Victoria: Hi,I analyzed your work, and I think it has a very unique and engaging storytelling style. The way you present your ideas and emotions really stands out. By the way are you currently working on any other stories or writing projects?
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What an interesting concept! Totally distinctive and invigorating. Your writing moves like water over stones...very flowy and skillful. Good Job!
This is a very strong opening chapter. I like how we get to learn about Calypso through the dream at the beginning. Your writing is incredibly gripping and I can't wait to find out what'll happen in the next chapter!
That's an intriguing opening with a nice hook at the end to ensure any reader would want to read on. Already we have a back story to the central character and some insight into her nature. She's someone the reader could easily develop an interest in - essential if they're going to read on. The written style is strong and draws the reader into the plot. If I were to offer any advice I'd suggest avoiding modifiers like 'almost as if' - They weaken the simile and are often completely unnecessary. You may also want to cull a few adjectives and adjectival phrases and adverbs where they impede the flow of this exciting and interesting narrative. Sometimes description takes the reader away from the story rather than helping unfold it. These are minor points - author to author - and you may disagree. I merely raise them as something to consider. I'm looking forward to reading on. This is refreshingly good.