What is your opinion?
Be awesome!
"Your so good at writing books I'm always amazed at how well you do the plot and characters. You have an amazing talent for writing! Can't wait for more from you! :) -Leslie H"
Has potential . . .
"The story is a bit rushed. I feel like you’re trying to compile a lot of information in all at once, which is keeping you from exploring the deeper connections of certain characters, settings, and emotions. Definitely look into improving your grammar and plot style through YouTube videos, Grammarly, and any other writing resources you can find. Overall, I like your mission for this book: finding the meaning of family whilst tackling the difficulties family can bring. It’s a very useful topic to discuss through the telling of a story, and that alone should keep you motivated to continue. Keep up the good work! ~ L A N • C A I ~"
OK plot
"I think the plot was the best part of this story. It could be a little laggy at times and then jump weeks ahead in others, so there was a lot to follow. It was a little confusing as well with the last names, Mr. This and Mrs. That. I'm not sure there was quite enough description to separate them in our minds. I do agree that you should seek either a proofreader or a website like Grammarly to improve your writing. This will be beneficial for your book and readers so they aren't trying to interpret what you're saying. There were parts that confused me, especially when talking about the year of the car crash. I believe you said it was in the 1800s, which obviously automobiles were not around then, so I do suggest going back and making sure everything agrees with one another. All in all, a good base that needs some improvement to be a great book. Good luck! -Author of Hollow's Charge"
OK , needs a little improvement
"So here is what I think. The story plot is very smooth, but one thing as constructive criticism, you really need to work on your grammar. Its not bad, but it does make the story not flow as well. I really enjoyed the perspective of Allen. She is a very ambitious girl, with many tragic events .I think that the way you wrote this story it sounded like you knew someone who had the same line of events. But I don't know. I think if you tried and re-wrote the whole story over again. Then the story would have a great deal of improvement. One more thing to add on about your grammar is, that there is a website called Grammarly, and it not only tells you what your doing wrong but it teaches you what your doing wrong. I think if you write more often, then think you can be a spectacular writer. One more thing, keep writing, because in the end it may help you out. So be the best you can be. And one thing could you please review my story? Thank you, for writing this wonderful book."
Bird's Nest
"The story is set in twenty first century. The story is all about the mysterious car accident that can change their lives. The story has a regular flow and a bit fantasy. Allen is left an orphan and under the care of her aunt and uncle. Her cousin Harley helps her out to get out of the family mess. The ending is a bit tragicomedy."
Bird's nest
"This story begins when Allen was a teenager ,her parent passed away. Therefore she was left under the care of her aunt and uncle. But soon they died in a car accident.Later, mystery encloses . The story is basically based upon bad deeds of blind lovers. At this point the plot seems unreal. But beyond this the whole story is fascinating."
birds Nest
"Okay! How brutal do you like your appraisals? I have only read the first chapter, and did not want to read any further. as you have said you required a proof reader. I believe that in some places we write how we speak i.e colloquial every day language. This can be used in books, but not in it's entirety. Your grasp of the English language is fair, but you need more work yourself. Read a few book written by popular authors maybe of the same genre. Your writing requires the following 1.. Correct punctuation and their use 2. Grammar 3. Be more descriptive of characters, and the scene you are in. The star rating reflects the above mentioned I hope this helps move you further forward in your writing Stephen"
Not bad plot-wise, but severely hindered
"The story itself isn't bad, but almost unreadable due to the author's low proficiency with the English language. The spelling is sometimes off, sentence structure is a hindrance to understanding what is going on, the narrative flow sometimes comes to a screeching halt and then jumps ahead without warning in the next paragraph, and the general narrative style is not kind on the reading enjoyment. The two things this author would benefit from most is reading more professionally written material and paying attention to the style and an editor, or even just a proofreader"
