What is your opinion?
Well written.
"Sorting out the plot twists in my head. Well written and attention grabbing plot. "
When the demon smiles
"Honestly, it's a great story. I love the plot, and the characters. I've seen some grammar/spelling errors but every story has them. The only thing I would recommend is spacing out your paragraphs and dialogue. It would make it much easier to read and understand. Other than that, I didn't see anything else wrong with it. It's an amazing story.!"
I have no words...
"I decided to re-make my reviews on this wonderful book. First IM SO GLAD YOU UPDATED!! Second, you deserve more reviews this book is super good! Amazing characters the plot the setting I'm so curious to know whats going to happen with Adonis!! Like his father is it, Phillip??? Or is Phillip being controlled by his father??!! I can't wait for the last chapter this must be a series! Good job I love reading this book Best Regards my friend I can't wait to see what the future will bring to you! -Leslie H."
Very good!
"I like mateo!.. your characters are very likable! I love where this story is headed! "
Wow
"very nise"
Different
"This was so different and not what I was expecting. I loved it from the first chapter. I love how uniquely it's told. Great Job Author."
Hooking
"The plot of the story is well thought out :) I can't wait for more!"
When The Devil Smiles (by Lamis Hoteit
"When The Devil Smiles is a really fun paranormal book full of angels with those pesky demons sprinkled in at those precise times that makes you rock back and groan while thinking both "I should have seen that coming" and "come on, stop believing the liar already." I loved what I read and I'm excited to review this knowing that the book may get more readers from it. That said, I try to include a little constructive criticism and I do want to point out that there were some punctuation errors. It wasn't horrendous, but it was a little annoying at times and did take some of the thrill away from the story. I'd just like to say that being sure you paragraph properly and making sure your quotation marks are directly surrounding the spoken material would help the story a lot. Now, just because there are punctuation errors doesn't mean you shouldn't go READ IT!! I love the angels and I love the different people and how they all care about the main character to an extent even though she feels broken, so great job!!"
Lovely
"I really loved how the story began. I couldn’t even put it down!! Awesome job!! The plot is fascinating and it’s always great to read a story different from the other ones that I’ve read. The more unique the better :) "
Nice
"I like the plot a lot. A very nice thing is that we can read personal point of view of the different caracters."
Good
"I did like your plot and your characterization which I felt were very well done. However, I did fins several technical errors which made the book hard to read."
Critical Review as of 11/6/20
"I did love the characters, but there are a few grammatical concerns I have. First things first, the story would be tons better if there were defined paragraph breaks (first chapter). The lack of paragraph breaks is a huge turn-off because the reader feels like they are reading a huge, neverending clump of text, especially because it's the first chapter. Secondly, limit the number of question marks, exclamation marks, caps lock and ellipses. It can get really boring really fast, and you lose the punch that is associated with using it. The rule of thumb should be to default to a full stop and there should be no more than two exclamation marks, one ellipse and five question marks per chapter. As for caps lock, use italics when required, and on *rare* occasion utilise the all-caps, and *don't* use a capitalised word in the middle of the sentence unless it's a proper noun. On a similar note, there is an overuse of the words 'anyway' and 'what?' Limit the usage of them as well. The dialogue sounds unnatural at times. Maybe explore your characters more to find out their unique voice and use it. And, if direct dialogue will be longer than conveying the message otherwise, use alternate methods. On a lighter note, the plot is magical. Your writer's voice is awesome and I absolutely adored the plot twist. I will surely continue reading this book and will recommend it to anyone. Keep writing, author; good job! x Vanessa"
Nice
"I really enjoyed reading this!"
