What is your opinion?
Great!
"Very amuzing to read. Your book has many interesting details that raises the readers' interest. ❤"
Murder On My Mind
"So I like this book because the entire time I was thinking "Just kill the teacher". Pause. Like the kids are suffering and getting killed by these evil teachers. Either way that's not the biggest part of the book. See these two main characters are trying to escape and are frightened out of their minds and I can't blame them. But with that said I was like, "Stab their knees or something!" The entire time. I was entertained and I'm sure that if you read this review you will be entertained as well."
Interesting Read
"I really liked the darkness in the story and I was biting my nails the whole time I read it. The plot is definitely fresh and thought inducing. It's creepy as it should be since it gives a dark academia vibe. I wanted someone to step in and save those poor souls from getting murdered by the evil lady. There are a few editing glitches here and there which can be easily fixed with a proper re-editing but otherwise I like the writing style and how gripping the tale was made by the author. Keep up the great work."
Interesting Story Line
"Dark Rose's has a very interesting story line. I'm not sure if the book is to be continued, thou, after the third chapter. However it grips the reader easily. The characters were developed properly and the plot is amazing. Yet, it needs editing, especially with the punctuation and paragraphs. You did good job overall!"
Good start
"Your story and writing style has great potential. Keep at it, I'd love to read the final and edited version of your book. "
Bloody Nightmare
"I agree with the other reviews. I think the plot and characters are really interesting. The chapters were a good length not too long or short. I like the serious focus on mental health issues and how graphic they can get. I'm super into Dark Stories throw in romance and I'm obsessed. My biggest critique would be the lack of setting. I would like More descriptive words to remind me what room they are in at any given time. Also, there were some grammar mistakes, but not enough to take me out of the story."
Horror at its Finest
"This story may not be finished yet, but the potential it has is great. The amount of horror I have felt in just a merely four chapters is indescribable and that is just the beginning. The evil doings of some of the characters in the book, made me so angry and scared at the same time. Your way of describing the horrifying events made me connect with the kids in the story. When they were scared, so was I; when they wanted to leave that school, I felt trapped with them as well. Great job overall!"
Great Concept!
"I'll echo what others have said and say that this is a really great concept and I think the plot/characters are great. The chapters could be a little shorter and I'm not sure why there are only three chapters in this book, I think it might make more sense to just combine all the sequels together into one since it feels to short to be a stand-alone. Also, there were quite of a bit of grammar/punctuation mistakes so a round of editing would be good. There was also a point where you said "she nervously grips her hands anxiously" and so getting rid of the redundancy in some of the sentences would be good. Again, nothing a bit of editing can't catch. Overall, really great suspense writing!"
Great Hook -- AWESOME POTENTIAL!!
"Right off the bat I'd love to say that the introduction hooked me! I love historical drama pieces and admire anyone who attempts them because of the immense about of research required to make it even a sliver of historically accurate. So kudos to you! I think your story has really great potential. If you're open to any constructive feedback, keep reading, but if not just know that you have so much potential!! Your story needs a little polishing but don't get discouraged! All stories do. :) I think the chapters could be a little bit shorter and it could definitely use some grammar/punctuation corrections, but all that will happen when you go back and revise. As Terry Prachett once said: "The first draft is just you telling yourself the story.""
Interesting but needs work
"Straight away your description grips the reader, but I’m not sure if a woman in the 18th century would be called Ellie, it’s very informal unless it is a nickname for Eleanor or Elizabeth. You need to make sure you write her name as Ms Norway and that you start the first sentence with The bell and not bell as it makes more sense and just bell on its own is a bit abrupt. There are problems with punctuation and your paragraphs sizes are a bit all over either they are are a little small or too long, and you need to make sure you start a new one when someone speaks and use capital letters at the start of speech. Ms Norway right away is set up to be terrifying in a great way. I do think the start of the next paragraph of chapter 1 needs to be changed and you say that either Samantha is either 17 years or a young girl and not both because that is telling us the same information twice which isn't needed, and you need to be careful of your tenses as you go between 1st and 3rd a few times. You do not need to put ’as’ before saying someone has spoken like ’as she said’ or ’as he replied’, just ’she said’ or ’he said’. The mistakes in this story do make it difficult to read, but the actual story itself is good, but I would like to learn a bit more about the characters like Samantha and Ms Norway, and why they are where they are. I also think you would benefit doing some research into what New England was like in the time it is set in just to help with setting the scene as well as attitudes and ’treatment’ towards and for the those with mental health issues at the time. I think your chapters would be better if they were broken up into smaller ones also. This is a saddening story that makes the reader feel much sympathy for Lily and the other characters, and it is also one that strikes fear into the reader because of Ms Norway. Keep working at it!"
