What is your opinion?
My past and present
"This book is absolutely amazing and fantastic, I did enjoy it. I wish find more about it. "
My experience with this story
"The plot is amazing. Two people fighting with each other to hide their love. The author has explained it through their conversation pretty well. I am wondering what's next. I like to add something to the story if the author explained other things to a little like emotions, body language, dress, and kind of things. It helps the reader to be in the moment. For example, when Dave said holding his coffee mug or taking a sip from the coffee."
My past and present
"I love the flexibility of the story. The flash backs and dialogue. I love the fact that the story seems like a reality thing in people's life. Love the story so much😍❣️♥️"
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"Amazing 😍 I love how you end of the chapters like I love that so much ❤️ I love this book so much❤️ Can't wait for the next chapter 😍"
My Past and Present (Joshii's Review)
"Hello! This is JLY (JoshLovesYou) First off, I like this Story, It had a Tragic Beginning but..The Chapters got more interesting for each Chapter. And about your Writing, There's no problem with it, They were a few errors and Spelling Mistakes But a Re-Read should do the trick. So Far, Keep Going! Your Story has Potential to become a Great One! Keep Writing! ♡"
Great Job!
"Just into the first chapter and I'm hooked! You have a great storyline going there. Keep going love!😃💕💥"
Interesting and cute 🥰
"I like the plot it's intriguing and it got me hooked, like dude! Idk which one to root for would I go to team Collin? Liam? or Dave? 😱 I also like your writing style IDK but it reminds me of the high school drama script that our teachers used to give to us If you know what I'm talking about. 🙃🙂 I've noticed things that you might want to improve. First: there are some grammar mistakes but don't worry it will get better in time and it still doesn't stop the story from being interesting to read. I suggest you install the Grammarly app.it would help you correct and improve your grammar and punctuation, it's a really good app I'm using it too. 😉 Second: the lack of using adjectives. I mean you introduce your characters you state their names but you didn't describe them. Like how they look; their facial structures, postures how tall are they, etc..try to illustrate your characters more, show/express their emotions more. By characterizing them it would help your readers to imagine them and would make them more realistic. Same with the surroundings try to further explain what's happening around. Again just described it like how you see it in your mind or how you imagine, this would make your story more relatable and realistic. P.s Just continue what you are doing, just keep on writing because you have the talent and I hope this review helps. I know I'm definitely not perfect in writing and my story has flaws in it, but all I want to do is to share what I have learned from my journey in penning to others. 🥰🥰🥰"
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"Slight grammar errors which made it a bit hard to read, but Liahnne and Collin- I ship!! Dave's a brat- Keep writing, and small fixes can be the biggest impact on a story! ~○_OriginalSwiftie13_○~"
Good Job!
"Im amazed keep writing I know you can make the story a great hit! Your really good don't give up! You have someone that wants you to continue writing! Would appreciate a review on my books! Keep being amazing author!"
My past and present
"You have a really interesting plot! It's a great book but the grammatical errors and the mixture between past tense and present tense can be annoying sometimes. But that can be changed with a little bit of editing. So far so good!"
Straight to the Point!
"I’m willing to change my review when the story is completed but as of now this is what I have: I love the plot that you have going for your story. It’s really interesting and captures the reader’s attention. I will say that because of your writing style, I wasn’t able to get as hooked onto the story as I would have liked to. Everything was put literally and it didn’t leave room for me to experience what was going on. I’m not sure if that makes sense and I’ll be happy to share more specifically if you want. I also noticed a mix of past and present tense and it threw me off. Of course I have to end this in a happy note and I will say I love the questions you ask in the end as a way to tease the readers about what happens next. It keeps them anticipating. Can’t wait to read what happens next. "
My Past and Present
"The plot is definitely interesting (btw her and Collin are who I ship in the story, sorry but Dave is kinda a douche as of rn) and the way you've structured your story reminds me of a script especially with the dialogue. There are some grammar, punctuation and spelling issues but nothing some proofreading won't fix. A suggestion, maybe add some more description and action so readers can get a better feel of the characters, setting and stuff like that. Overall, nice story and keep writing! "
Beautifully Unique
"It is obvious straight away that the writing is unique and thought through. I love how your writing is presented ♥️ Keep it up x"
