What is your opinion?
Lovely!
"Ok, so I will preface this by saying that this typically isn't my genre, but nevertheless, I still found this story quite thrilling. There were likely a few grammatical errors but none so severe that they impacted my ability to enjoy the story. I really have to take my hat off to you and your use of imagery. It's just the right amount. I see alot of authors here that tend to shy away from it or are quite simplistic and vague with it. Yours is as close to perfect as I've seen thus far. The only minor critique I have is the length of your chapters. Other than that, great job!"
Very Enjoyable!
"Disclaimer: I have only read the first chapter of this story so far I liked the story, especially with the futuristic feeling about it. The action scenes were very well written, and the writing kept you with more questions and made you want answers. I have only one small critic. I personally feel like the diologue could have been better if the action of the person doing the talking was stated first rather than after, or in the paragraph before. That would have kept me from double checking who was speaking a few times in the story. Even with that critic though, I really enjoyed the story. So far, I would definetly recomend this story to action lovers and futuristic story lovers (again, this is on chapter 1, so I don't know how things will go from here)!"
Excited to read more!
"I really like the futuristic cyber feel of the story and the action was well written! However I did get confused in a few spots on who was talking and who was evading/shooting who. Other than that I'm really excited to read more of it. Great job!"
Great Start!
"I'm reviewing this at Chapter 1, so I'm not sure how the rest of the story/characters will develop. From what I read, you are a very talented writer who is great at action sequences. I was honestly a little confused as to what was going on with that trashcan, so maybe some more explanation is needed as to what was happening with all this futuristic technology, but perhaps you'll be explaining that in future chapters. The characters are interesting and I can sense perhaps a little romance brewing, but we shall see. I think this is a great start and if the story continues this way then this is a five star for sure!"
Great first chapter
"I'm interested to see where this goes! The characters are so interesting."
Great start!
"What a great first impression! Lots of mystery and a great hook right from the start! Can’t wait to see what happens next for these characters. A few grammar mistakes and run on sentences here and there, nothing to pull me out of the story or anything, just something to note (I’m so bad for run on sentences so it tends to be something I notice because I do it so much in my own writing :p) but an excellent start! Great job of defining/describing the world/characters as well, nice clear descriptions that weren’t overwhelming. Overall fantastic job! :) "
Cyberpunk Meets Lord of the Rings Meets Cyberchase
"I am interested in the concept here. The book gives me a sort of "Cyberchase"/"Cyberpunk" feel with a tease of "Lord of the Rings", because, elves. I like the action and the mystery, though I wish I got a bit more explanations because I'm quite confused. I'm hoping that my questions will be answered soon! ^.^ Overall, I like the idea and characters. but I do think the story needs a fine polish for grammar and punctuation. However, I think those points can mostly be overlooked if you're into the concept and enjoy flowery descriptions - you'll get plenty of that here. :)"
The tales of the squad 13
"The overall book was very nicely written apart from a few confusions on my part the story was great. It's just that I am not used to reading books that are written in third person point of view. But your is really nice. Keep writing."
Great bones
"Looking past the writing style issues that made this story a bit difficult to follow, I can say I thoroughly enjoyed the underlying read. The author does a wonderful job pushing the story forward with action and dialogue and the plot premise is unique and exciting. It could definitely use some editing and some re-organizing of paragraphs, but overall, a fun read. To the author, should you ever decide to upload edited chapters, I would be happy to update my review as well! "
Legit👌
"The writing style, the sentence structure, the character personalities and the display of emotions and action is beautifully described! I fell in love with the narrative style of this book! "
Hillbilly 50
"Not top notch writting"
