When the Coin Lands Crooked

When the Coin Lands Crooked (working title)

All the Wrong Heroes - Book 1

A Message from Your Sorta-Humble Author

Hey, friend. You're here! Which means either you’re a glutton for punishment, or you’re a dear, dear friend who signed up for more than you bargained for. Either way, thanks for being here.

I need your help. The kind where you poke holes in my story and tell me, as kindly (or brutally) as you like, where things are working and where they just… aren’t.

Here’s what I’d love for you to keep an eye out for as you read:

1. Was It a Page-Turner—or Did You Start Checking Your Watch?

Did you want to keep reading, or did you find yourself drifting off and daydreaming about, I don’t know, cheese wheels or whatever? If you hit a spot where you were tempted to skim, note it down.

Bonus points for telling me why.

2. Do the Characters Sound Like Themselves—or Like Each Other?

Could you always tell who was talking, even if I forgot to use dialogue tags? Did the banter sound natural, or did you roll your eyes so hard you saw your own brain?

If anyone said or did something that felt “off,” let me know. (Yes, even if it was intentional. Sometimes I forget my own backstories.)

3. Can You See the World, or Is It All Just Fog?

Was the setting—Brackenford, Dunholm, the dragon’s ice-caked chaos—clear in your mind? Or did you have no idea where we were?

If you got lost (geographically, not existentially), please flag the spot.

4. Is the Plot Actually… Plotting?

Did you always understand what the party was trying to accomplish and why?

If you found yourself thinking, “Wait, why are we doing this again?”—please let me know where the confusion hit.

5. Did You Care—Even a Little?

Were you worried, laughing, invested, or did you feel as emotionally connected as a doorknob in a locked room?

If you stopped caring, where did I lose you? If you cared a lot, tell me what worked!

6. Continuity Shenanigans

Did you spot any continuity errors (wrong names, timeline wibbles, someone suddenly wielding two swords when they only had one, etc.)?

Point out any moments where you tripped up on the details.

7. Magic & Mayhem—Did It Make Sense?

Were the rules of the world (magic, items, curses, gods, whatever) clear? Or did you read a scene and wonder if I’d been drinking “fermented dragon vomit”? (you'll get that later)

Tell me if you wanted more lore, or if it was too much and your brain started to melt.

8. Style Points

Did you ever have to reread a sentence three times to figure out what was happening? Were there moments when you had no idea who was speaking?

(If so, apologies—and please highlight!)

Final Bits:

If you loved a line, character, or moment—tell me! My fragile writer’s ego craves validation.

If you hated a section, wanted to skip it, or thought “I’d cut this if it were me,” don’t hold back.

Don’t sweat the typos unless they ruin the vibe. Big-picture stuff first.

Margin comments, emails, smoke signals—all forms of feedback accepted.

Brutal honesty is welcome, as long as you keep it clever.

That’s it. Have fun, mark up the manuscript however you want, and remember: every note helps make this book less of a “rough draft” and more of a hopefully “can’t-put-it-down” adventure.

—Moon in the North