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UNFORGETTABLE LOVE: Ximena and Sébastien
"Unforgettable love: Ximena and Sébastien. I really liked the book. It has a beginning, middle, ending and a twist. I would definitely recommend this book to someone who love or someone somebody who is into romance or love stories. I have no doubt that they to will enjoy reading this book and the second. To the author, keep dreaming and keep writing. Thanks for recommending me to read your book. "
Unforgettable Love : Sebastian and Ximena
"Literally everything in this book is amazing 🤩🤩🤩 I also liked how you've used a different language in this book 😍😍 It's Italian 🙈💜 I've learned a little Spanish but I don't really understand Italian because Spanish was already hard for me to learn 😂😂 Let alone, Italian 😐 Also, your summary was short but captivating 🤯🤯🤯 Anyways, since you're an author who wants to improve their work, here's some tips 🦋💕 1) You've put a warning in the first chapter, am I right? So, why don't you put it at the summary 😄🧡 I personally think it's better to put it at the summary because readers will usually take a look at the summary first 📚❤️ 2) Please fix the grammar mistakes in this book 😁😁 This because many readers will read a storybook to either learn the language or just enjoy their favorite author's book 📖💕 It's actually nothing that serious, so it's not a necessity to fix mistakes. However, it's just one of my suggestion 🙈💞 I really enjoyed this book and I hope that you'll become a successful published author in the future 🔮🔮🔮🔮 Till then, byeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee 🤗💕✨ "
Interesting plot
"So far the book kept me hooked. It's thrilling and engaging. Definitely would recommend to give it a read"
Absolutely Love!!!
"I absolutely LOVE this story, the characters, and the genuine emotion and enthusiasm the Author has incorporated into her writing style. Writing a novel is not an easy task, and I am blown away with how the author has already grabbed my attention and made me feel invested in the characters and the story line. I cannot wait to see the rest of the novel unfold and to watch the author develop personally! "
Unforgettable love
"I think this story is true to its title. It is unforgettable. I have always had a thing for mafia stories but I never came across something that I would like most of them didn't have the kind of punch I was looking for but your story beats everything that is out there. Wow. I read it till the last chapter and I can't wait till you update more. A truly splendid work that has left me speechless. I don't know how to express how much I love your story. But I am glad that I got to review your story. Because now I have a great mafia story to read. Please update as often as you can I just don't think I can wait. "
I need more!
"This story keeps you captivated with the bits it gives and holds back. I'm so interested to see where it goes, onto my read list is one place. :) I'm a sucker for a good romance, and even though, I've yet to truly see it, the tastes that I've been given are fantastic. Thank you for the appetizers. :)"
Unforgettable love
"This author captivates you from the start. The plot and pace of the story unfolding was excellent. I found almost zero grammatical errors and the details were significant. This author's writing style allows you to build a strong relationship with each character right from the start. My favorite part is when ximena turns into the "word samurai" and puts the racist bimbo in her place, I cheered her and felt what she felt as herself and her roommate Lucia.I also loved the amount of dialogue the author put into the story. Its left me wanting more. So overall great job! "
Unforgettable Love
"I am a sucker for a good mafia story, and an epic mix up story, and this one's right up that alleyway. It's a good story, and a good premise, and I think it has promise. It’s got that organic friendship that is to die for, and is so relatable, and I really enjoyed the dynamic between Ximena and Lucia. What I did find strange was that Ximena didn't put up a fight when Grace and Thalia were leading her off to only God knows where. Who blindly goes along like that, after being mistaken for a whore? I think that was out of character for Mercado, especially with how tough she is portrayed. Another thing I would suggest is making it clear who is speaking and keeping the laughs unwritten. A simple, ‘she laughed’ instead of 'haha' would work. I suggest splitting chapters 5 and 6. It jumbles everything up with Capo’s POV in chapter 5. Also, the scenes that repeat in POV switches, only share what we didn't learn from the previous POV, so it doesn’t become repetitive. I don't want to come off too nitpicky, so that's all I'll say in terms of mechanics. In regard to the story and the plot, I enjoyed it. I liked that we were able to see things from their different POVs."
Different in a good way
"With all the mixing of POVs, the book is real good. I finished the first book and I am speechless, I adore and love all the characters, and they seem to have different opinions on different situations. I just hope their story becomes good, coz it’s like danger is always trying to find a way towards them! Kudos to the writer❤️! All the very best!"
Intriguing
"I like it. The plot is amazing and the book has a mysterious effect. I love how Ximena is bubbly yet feisty. Your way of writing is amazing and I wish to read more. "
Unforgettable Love
"Unforgettable Love is a romance story set in a mafia world where the female protagonist unexpectedly finds the man of her dreams under dangerous circumstances. This review was written as part of the Roadmap Awards, and detailed feedback will be shared with the author. First of all, I would like to point out that Akitsu uses a theme that could turn the story into a gripping thriller, full of suspense, the darker side of human life and yes, also a love story. However, the plot and the structure of the story need a lot of work and adjustments to make the text more coherent and focused. I had my problems with some aspects of the narrative, and I sincerely hope that the author will reflect on my criticism. There was a lot of telling, but I will say that there were also great moments of showing - the author just needs to find a way to stick to showing more. Other issues were grammar and punctuation, but this can be easily fixed with thorough editing. Romance novels are challenging to write, especially with various POVs, and I guess many writers find it hard to come up with an original twist. However, I am sure that with a lot of work, significant improvement can be achieved. Dear Akitsu, don't be discouraged by my feedback - one lesson I had to learn (and am still learning) is that criticism is one of the greatest teachers and motivational boosts in becoming a better writer. Don't be afraid to change a text - I know there is a great story to tell somewhere in your writing."
Read me
"This needs a lot of work, you can’t present dialogue and think people are going to enjoy this book. I’m so sorry if it’s harsh but description is needed, telling us where Lucia is. It’s so easy, just say that she’s in a place, it’s always lovely to jump the reader into your book but for the reader it feels much better to slowly pull the reader in with your descriptions. It helps, it’s lovely, it’s nice. Also the bio is just too long, there’s a way to create a bio without tell your whole story line. I would say write your goals, what do you want both of your MCs to achieve and stick with it. Your writing style was so unbalanced and the description was basic. I’m sorry if that sounds awful but it takes practice. I would suggest take a hour to write - I do :) and focus on writing prompts so you can become better at writing sentence structures or just look at books. Because your writing style was poor, I just couldn’t read. I’m so sorry, it was so hard to read and to go on. I think this author needs to learn basic sentence structure for a book. There’s plenty of books out there, having CAPITALISED words aren’t needed if it’s exclaimed. "
