What is your opinion?
Interesting start!
"(Ongoing, read chapter 1) This was an interesting opening! The opening paragraphs were very relatable - even though I quite enjoyed Maths, I never really understood what was actually going on in it xD The dialogue was well written and definitely the way people of their age speak - the "your mom" insult was especially apt xD I wasn't expecting a sex scene so quickly but the writer introduced the situation well. The descriptions were good, and I wanted to smack him when he said what he said to ruin the mood .... The paragraph about not knowing how to describe a kiss was well written and added a new layer of depth to his character. Good job! :)"
You and me and you
"The story is good but it is a bit fast paced. I would have loved to know the MC's and their relationship between them. I think the erotic part is a bit too soon. But it is just the start I am looking forward how it goes. Good Luck!!"
You and Me and You
"The beginning caught my attention, being very relatable regarding math class. The interactions between the MC's and the other characters were very realistic. The plot was okay. I would suggest giving more time for Rohit and Lisa to get to know each other before jumping into a physical relationship. In the story. things seemed to get hot and heavy right off the bat. I found that rather confusing, however, that was just my personal opinion. There were a few grammar mistakes, which can easily be fixed with a little editing. It's only the first chapter, so I can't judge the story that well. But overall, it has potential. Good luck!!"
Interesting start, but could use some more information
"Written after reading chapter 1: To be honest, I started out pretty confused as I read this the first time. I got about halfway through before I figured out that the narrator was a boy. I think because the cover picture is a girl, I assumed the narrator would be too? I didn't think that there was enough background given. Rohit and Lisa are friends, apparently, but then she pulls him out of class and takes him to an empty classroom to fool around, but I missed the part about why she was doing any of this. Maybe add a few paragraphs at the beginning about their history, or something that can explain their motivation for this. There is a lot of dialogue, which I like, but sometimes I wasn't clear on who was speaking. For example, on my first read, I thought it was the teacher who thought Lisa was sexy, instead of some unnamed boy in the class. I think if you just add a bit more description to the situation, and a bit of background, it will make the characters a lot more believable. I look forward to reading the next chapter and seeing where it goes from here."
Intriguing
"Kudos to the author for depicting what I presume as teens angst. Bitching about your least favorite teachers with your friends - or lovers, and expressing your frustration internally, it was very entertaining to read that! Till this day, I still dislike mathematics that I'd rather write a ten page essays. I enjoy reading things that I can relate to, (minus the 18+ part) and I'm sure other would too. I'd love to know how Lisa and Rohit first met and even hope that their relationship can go beyond fulfilling each other's desires in the future chapters. So far, I believe that you'll be able to improve and I think that you're doing really well!"
Open Book, Anything can Happen
"This is my first erotic labeled novel. It seems like there is going to be lots of fun throughout the story. I will surely keep on my reading list. "
