What is your opinion?
Magical!
"Magical. Magical. Magical—how the first scene and the views and the sounds are woven into words. It gave a serene feeling and introduced the characters smoothly. The images are vivid and colorful, and the situation turned a bit electric with each passing chapter. I like how it started with them being normal teens—breaking some rules and venturing outside their school's premises. Youhei seems collected and intriguing. Meldei has a mysterious air around her and I love her positivity and how she always manages to push herself to help her friends. Nika and Lea are a bit dramatic, but the genre is drama, so don't mind me. The characters' interactions are natural and the way you weave a flashback into the scene is genius. Your choice of words is between simple and elevated and I like the use of figurative language. There are some verbs switched from past to present, so try to keep a consistent tense. In chapter 2, you switched once from third to first POV as well. Other grammar errors include prepositions, but there's nothing that hinders the understanding of the story. It's really lovely and serene, and the characters have a lot to reveal! Looking forward for more! :)"
Beautiful
"Howdy! This is such a wonderful story from what I’ve read so far! There are some sentences that need a bit of rewording but other than that this is very well written story. I would definitely recommend this to those wanting a good romance story with a little sprinkle of something special. It has an atmosphere of beauty around it. I can’t wait to see what else our wonderful author has to offer!"
Very well written
"I love the way this book was written, the author really knows how to hook a reader. I was very intrigued from the beginning! Well done!"
Great!
"When I read the description/saw the title/read the first chapter, I thought this would be a fantasy story. I'm not sure if that's what you were going for, but that's definitly the vibe I get. I'm not really sure where the romance in this book lies since I'm not feeling it as much, but since this is a teen romance maybe I'm just not the demographic this is aimed at as far as the romance goes. I think the writing style is really pretty, as I said it sounds like fantasy and has a very whimsical feel. Some of the words didn't really make sense and there are some grammar and punctuation errors. It feels almost as if the book was written in another language and then translated into English, so I think some of the translations were translated very literally, so I think some of that needs to be changed to sound more natural. Overall, great work!"
Amazing
"I loved it right from the first chapter honestly. You have such a way with words that it kind of makes me jealous. It was a little confusing for me at times, some sentences need a bit of rewording but, great job. I can't wait for you to update it :)"
Whistle in The Woods
"I liked how the novel is very realistic and the characters are very innocent "
Melodious
"The author starts the chapter describing a sweet melody that is heard in the breeze in the woods. The entire chapter is describing two characters meeting there. And through chapter a surreal sense of melody stays with me as the story moves ahead. Beautiful effect ! The writing makes you feel as if it is a fantasy but it is actually describing common place things, or may be it will take off into a full fledged fantasy later, I don't know yet. But I enjoyed that. Well done. Keep writing !!"
Whispers :)
"You have amazing writing style. You did beautiful job with words, with expressing feelings and with descriptions of surroundings. Great. It was just so confusing. Your choice of names, and the way you change them. When in the end it was the same person. Sorry, I just can’t give you five stars for it. Maybe some description would help, because I was really struggling with understanding who was talking or who the main character was waiting for. You are very talented. You know how to do magic with words. Thank you for sharing 🙏❤️"
