Alan

One of the best on Inkitt!

Very interesting concept, and what makes it even better is that it is VERY well done. I was hooked from the first chapter. Even the sex scenes are beautifully done. I mean this is a story that would be eaten up by book clubs. It hits a lot of the feels, and despite not being the father or a caretaker to a person with mental disabilities, this story hits emotions and feelings that are serious and needed. I mean this when I say this: Your story is publishable. Great job.

Potential is there for a very good story….

This book has potential, and that is from somebody who normally doesn’t read romance books. There is a lot of good here. Love the slow burn connection of the MC’s. The thing that I feel is holding this story back is the “Show don’t Tell” rule. There is a lot of telling going on. I kind of understand doing it early on when you are setting up the backstory of the MC, but it continues on for a while. The middle to back half of the book really clears up and the tension grows and explodes (in a good way). But the somewhat rough grammar and the telling still exist there. Clean that up and it’s a very solid book.

Very well done!

I’m going to go ahead and state my ignorance of this type of book. I have never read anything like it. I usually stick to literary fiction, young adult fantasy, or even some upmarket fiction. This is the first LGBTQ+ romance I have ever read. And being that I am not necessarily in the LGBTQ+ community it is an interesting read for me. I love that this story gives me the first person perspective, which allows me to better grasp the emotions to which the narrator is going through. I also love that the relationship is so well built before the climax, allowing us to really feel for the main character because we knew how he felt when he loved him. It’s a great story that shows the difference between the love of families who are open minded and accepting and those who do not. It was well written. Great cliffhangers at the end of the chapters that made you want to read on. And very importantly, it showed but didn’t tell. Good characters, good relationships, good use of POV. Very good book.

Not my cup of tea, but still a darn good cup of tea!

The story was very well done. There were very few grammatical issues, and that made it easy to read. The first chapter sucks you into a beautifully set up place that the author did an incredible job describing. Not too much detail, not too little, and showed without telling. Very good. The only part of this well done story that I had a hard time with was what some might call the conflict. I understand that it is an internal conflict of a young woman trying to find her way to trust men after what she has seen, but I feel that struggle is not strong enough to carry this story alone. Still, the setting, the artistic writing, along with the strong opening is enough for me to say that this is a good book, and the author shows a true talent for writing.

Really like the story!

The plot, the characters, and the writing talent are there. However, the book is pulled in so many different directions with creatures, time travel, and a drop-off of women that this book really could be split into an entire saga. This is a Handmaid’s Tale meets Manifest meets the shapeshifting part of twilight. And that is a lot to cram into one story, so I feel that some parts were slightly rushed (the actual plane crash for example). Still the author did a good job of writing the MC. She has an attitude and a personality that are easy to get behind, and considering writing with a voice is so coveted now, I feel that this is huge. So bravo on writing a grand character, now it’s just about adding depth to a story that has many pieces and needs some nuance.

Wow...so good!!!

Honestly, I read this book because of all the badges on the cover. Figured it had to be doing something right if it’s winning all of those awards. And...wow. It lived up to the hype and then some. If you’ve read this author’s work before then you know that she paints a picture with every word, but honestly scoping through the writing on here, each bit of phrasing and every piece of diction and syntax was perfect. It was like an example a professor would give you of great work, except it’s a bear 20 chapter example. Really well done. Fighting The Harrowing for the top spot on Inkitt.

Enjoyable & Unique

I must say, this is quite the interesting read. And I mean that in a good way. The short stories were different from any others I have heard and it made for an entertaining read. I’m adding this to my reading list for any updates and added stories because I enjoyed them so much. McDornalds - read kinda like a super random story that was entertaining to the last drop...of poisonous ketchup. It reminded me of a mix of Songebob, Rick & Morty, and some random Adult Swim kinda stuff. Antler - again entertaining. A lot more serious than the first story and well done throughout. Solid dialogue, characters, suspense, and action. Carrots - short but still able to be deep and share a meaningful morale. Impressively written and impressively thought out for such a short piece. Cow - Again very random. Like, very random. Was a little confused for part of it, but still was entertained. Summary: enjoyable, random, and unique. I very much liked it and will continue looking for your additions to this collection.

Good job

The author has a way with words. You can see it early on. The first chapter is a great hook, albeit very short. Still the author creates a solid tone for the beginning of the book with solid word choice. It could be upped a little bit by making the chapters and the detail longer, maybe diving into the feeling and emotion of the characters a bit more. If the author used the same detail to describe the setting and emotions of the characters as they did in describing the physical appearance and action in chapter one, we would have a fantastic book. Still this is a good read. A couple clean ups on the grammar/punctuation and you are doing an excellent job. Keep it up.

I can see the romance starting...

Overall it’s a pretty interesting read. I’ve never been one for the romance genre or the teenage girl as the main character kind of books, but this plays well. I’m a fan of books that switch POV between characters as I think it can add a really good element to a story and offer depth about characters. This story does that decently well, although I wish the characters had a little more depth to them. Right now, I would say just keep adding. The more you add, the more this story starts to come along and a plot will take form. Looking forward to the additions. As for the grammar/punctuation, it just needs a little editing love. A once-over and this can be a 5* book. You got this!!!

Just needs some editing and it will be great.

I must say, this story has potential. Right now there are only a couple of short chapters, but still the plot and the writing style are intriguing. Good work on: - the story. The premise and plot are still somewhat unknown, but it is good nonetheless. And that’s because... - the main character is well written. Although there are only about 5 pages to this story at the time I read it, the character is very relatable. Maybe that is because I too am a smarta** with a mouth on me. - the writing style is also great. I am jealous of the author’s ability to think of and choose the perfect word to describe what is happening or being described in the story. It’s fantastic. Needs a little work: - the formatting and the grammar can make this a somewhat tough read at times. Whether it be punctuation or grammar it stops the story from fully flowing and the reader from getting to good a grasp on the characters which is surprising given how good the word choice and diction of the writer are. You are well on your way to a good write. Just needs a little cleaning up in editing.