What is your opinion?
Good story so far
"The story is written very well, I cannot wait to read the rest to find out it the boy can save the sisters. I recommend this story to everyone. Hope to see more for this author soon. "
I. Love. This. Story! SPOILERS
"[SPOILERS IN MY REVIEW] Off the bat, I am SOOO happy to see a character named Blithe! My best friend’s name is Blythe and it makes me super giddy to see her name since it’s so rare. I had to send a picture to show her. Oh, I love your vocabulary SOOO MUCH! So beautiful how you describe the characters in the beginning. For some reason my mind was flowing, like wind or like someone dancing eloquently while reading your story, the words were just so pretty. “But she was vinegar, bitter and acerbic.” Oh, I love it so much. The characterization is phenomenal. It’s so nice to see such an authentic, pure relationship between sisters. And it’s nice that they’re self aware and aware of their surroundings as well, it’s refreshing. [ It’s nice to see the older sister struggling with how she feels. At first she wishes her little sister will never be tamed, then she falls into her mother’s word and thinks “mama is right.” It’s like deep down she understands that her sister is who she is, but as the older one she worries about her as well. Worried she won’t fit in. It’s very pure and realistic, something siblings do worry about. To love someone as they are, but also worry about them being who they are in the world we’re in. ] [ The childish reaction of the younger sister is also a good portrayal. The tantrum and the wishes. The hopelessness and the irrational resentment. It’s really well written out. ] The overall plot to this story is fascinating. It leaves me wanting to read more. And the fact that the characters are both relatable and realistic is even better. The emotions are so raw and real, delicately explained with beautiful vocabulary. It’s really great. This may sound a mess, but I wrote it out while reading to get a good layout of my thoughts. I really hope you continue this story, I really want to see where it’ll go."
Damn...
"Wow, I have no words. Although there's only one chapter so far, this story is fantastic. Your writing style is super compelling and draws the reader in. I love how descriptive you are when you are comparing the two sisters, it really brings the characters to life. The only reason I didn't give full stars for your plot is because there is only one chapter and it's the prologue so I'm still not entirely sure how the book is going to unfurl. However, I love the suspense you created with the ending and the overall flow of the chapter. There were a few technical errors in the chapter, a few sentences were not completely finished, and some grammar errors, little mistakes everyone makes. Again, I think your language is super descriptive and really gives your characters a "soul". I think you're writing is amazing and I can't get over how good this story is in just one chapter! Keep up the superb work!"
Beautiful!
"I've only read two chapters, awaiting the updates, and I am so riveted. This is amazing so far. Your writing style is absolutely beautiful. You can't help but love it. As I've only read two chapters, I'm not sure what exactly the plot of the story is in its entirety, so it may be deserve a higher rating than I have given it at the time of this review. So far, your characterization is solid. I feel that Ori and Blithe have real depth to them, despite only having known them for a very short while. I really hope you continue to write, because you have such a real, raw talent for writing, which is clearly apparent in the snippet of your work I've read so far. Best of luck in finishing this story :)"
Lives up to the promise of Magic
"Even though it’s only the first chapter, the author has set the tone for the story and delivers on the magic it promises. The writing style is beautiful, with breathtaking descriptions and stunning imagery. The perfect read for fantasy lovers. I love the slight hints between good and evil, it gives the story some density, and makes me want to follow the two sisters journey. The author portrays emotion really well. A great read already. I’m looking forward to see where this heads. Well done! X"
Breathtaking
"The writing style is absolutely amazing and beautifully interwoven in a very compelling, creative, and elegant manner that instantly sucks the reader into what your trying to portray and express through such immaculate wording. But the best part that I find myself drawn to is how I can physically feel all the expressive and vibrancy that goes along with the dynamics of this story. However, the only concern I see myself having is the fact that there isn't a solid foundation for a whole plot yet, (And yes, I know this is just the prologue,) but the key features of the actual lining for the plot could use just a little bit of work, but otherwise, an absolutely breathtaking read."
