What is your opinion?
Wow
"very nise"
Impeccably Written
"This novel is truly one of a kind.It was nothing that I expected...You know the typical supernatural story about Vampires and werewolves,the one where they are enemies.Instead the author takes you on an adventure through the history of strigoi,descendants,the elders,demons and God. The author paints a vivid picture of the Earth and just what Humans are doing to it,therefore raising a general awareness in people everywhere. This book has the best grammar so far,almost as if the author would have spent hours combing through her words. This novel deserves to be made into either or a series or a movie.It is that Good."
The descendants
"I love this story!! Characters are awesome!"
One Of A Kind
"Taylor has absolutely created a masterpiece! In her novel, The Descendants, she includes vampires, but this should no way limit the span of her work. This novel is completely original, with a truly inspiring plot, and characters so real you will feel like you've known them forever. This is an action-packed adventure, so well written and flawless, that it will be hard for anyone to put it down until the heart-stopping end. Taylor has beautifully crafted a story laced with a higher purpose. Throughout, there are overarching themes of unconditional love, forgiveness, and redemption that will speak to the heart of even the most cynical critics. The main characters, Aurora and Gabriel, are flawed heroes, desperately trying to live out their full potential and purpose. As you travel though peaks and valleys with them, you will find yourself cheering them on as they take on a foe that would make the strongest among us quake. Stephanie Meyers may have started the vampire genre, but Taylor if forging her own path, and I for one hope she keeps going."
looks good
"it looks good so far. there seem to be no errors and that's great. you have serious potential as a writer."
Pros and Cons of Descendants
"The author has done a wonderful job of crafting the visual experience throughout this story. Each scene is easy to picture and adds a depth of immersion. The author has taken great care in crafting a background/history/origin for her paranormal creatures, primarily vampires and demons. While the overall storyline is solid and well thought out there are a few issues with this work that require the author's attention. The first and foremost of these is Repetitive Emphasis. Unfortunately, from the first chapter right on through to the epilogue this is an issue. A point of dialogue or introspections will be repeated several times for emphasis. While the sentence structure is different the message conveyed to the reader is the same over and over. Repetitive emphasis is like salt. A little goes a long way and over much of it will spoil an otherwise well-written work. This often leads character motivations to feel overly dramatic and thus cheapen an otherwise tense or touching moment. There is far less of this in the 2nd half, however, as more action takes the place of dialogue and introspections. With this aside, the other issue is POV. The work is clearly 3rd person omniscient however is written primarily as 3rd limited. Instead of utilizing the full power of the omniscient point of view the reader is thrust from one head to another then back again. To the reader, if you are looking for an interesting paranormal story with a few good twists and you should give it a read. To the Author, I highly recommend picking up a few NY times best sellers that are written from omniscient and using them to refine your style. Also, Jerry Jenkins has resources of self-editing, cutting and sentence crispness that I believe you would find helpful. Keep up the great work and never stop writing!"
A Great Read
"This book has potential and has kept me on the edge of my seat. However, I have identified a few things that the author, Nikki Lee Taylor, can improve on. Personally, I thought the pacing was too slow in the first chapter. The other chapters were fine. I don't think you should describe everything as much, especially in the part where Gabriel was working up his courage to enter the house. Add a bit of excitement in the first few chapters; this keeps the reader hooked. However, don't rush through it too much. The trick is to find the right pacing. Another thing you could do is to make a short prologue in the beginning, maybe when Gabriel turned into a strigoi. Make it brief and mysterious. For inspiration, check the first chapter in the Harry Potter series. The prologue will give the reader more information about Gabriel, as well as making your book more interesting. Another thing I thought you could improve on is where Gabriel fought the wolf in the first chapter. In my (limited) experience in writing fight scenes, I found that keeping it short and simple does the trick. This means that you should not focus on the tiny little details in the fight, but the big overall picture. Also, I would recommend you extend the fight scene too. Personally, I thought that the fight was too short and wasn't as dramatic as I would've liked it. I also found a few grammar and punctuation mistakes. Since I write in American English and you write in British English, don't take this part very seriously. There are a few past and present tense mistakes and I also found that you have a habit of writing three periods instead of a dash. From my knowledge, you use three periods when the character trails off naturally while a dash is for when the character unexpectedly stops talking. For example: "What do you think's going to happen?" George asked. "I don't know," she replied. "There are so many possibilities. We could die, win, lose, survive..." OR "What do you think's going to happen?" George asked. "I don't know," she replied. "There are so many possibilities. We could die, win, lose, survive-" A loud crash echoed throughout the house. They jumped up, ready to defend themselves. Again, don't take my advice on punctuation and grammar. Actually, don't take any of my feedback personally. Just do whatever you think is best. This is my opinion, and there are many people who will disagree with me. I can definitely say that one day, this book will be sitting on a bookshelf. Keep writing! -Ellie"
