What is your opinion?
Gripping read!
"(complete) This is one of the few stories on here that I've read (and finished) in one sitting.; the shorter chapter lengths definitely helped with that, but it was definintely the intriguing storyline that kept me going. I'm not familiar with the game on which this is based, but that didn't hinder my enjoying the story. The set-up is well done and the main characters are introduced in a clear and distinct manner. There were a lot of characters included, so it took me a while to figure out who was who, but I found the dynamic between the friends entertaining and realistic - they definitely came across as a regular group of teens with their banter and relationship drama. The descriptions were well done, especially during the more action-y scenes. The dialogue was great too and read like something that this age group would actually say in real-life, instead of the robotic, formal claptrap seen in other stories ... The writer has a knack for creating tension and suspense; the change in POVs really helped in achieving this. I found that some of the paragraphs were a bit long and could've been broken up more for ease of reading. I'm not mad on using capital letters to show that a character is shouting, but that's just a personal thing. I'd have loved to have read more of Josh's POV, but I understand that that couldn't really be done in the earlier chapters without giving everything away. All in all, I enjoyed the read (even if it ruined 'Frère Jacques' for me forever xD) - great job! :)"
Really Well Done
"I really enjoyed this story. It was well written and I tried to take my time with it but finished it before I even realized it. Had to reread it a couple times, cause a few things were a little confusing to me. I had to look into Until Dawn to understand a little more, but this twist was nicely done. I find anything with Wendigo's extremely fascinating. There are a few grammar and misspellings that need to be cleared up a bit but that's really all. Awesome work. I look forward to reading more. :D"
Josh's Butterfly
"I loved this! Lots of twists and turns with Wendigos thrown in! "
Josh's butterfly
"I really enjoyed your story. It was very interesting, different, and intense. There was a couple of times in your story though that I couldn't understand what was going on so I had to reread some parts to know what was going on. You also had a few minor error mistakes. Overall the story was amazing and really enjoyed the story. Thank you for all your hard work and dedication to your stories. "
/A/-mazing!
"I love the story so far! I am all for OCs! And this OC seems badass yet soulfully beautiful! I can't wait to continue reading! Carter is amazing! You're amazing! I rest my case."
Josh's Butterfly
"It kept me reading and wanting to find out what's next."
THE BEST!!!
"I’ve taken my time reading this piece and I for one LOVED the relationship between Carter and Josh. This has been one of the best fan fiction retellings of Until Dawn I have read, and I can’t wait to read more of your work!!!!! I usually don’t agree with OC’s but this to me was really well done!!! "
Kind of Jarring
"The author definitely, no question, cares about her characters. And we are invited to join in; but there were a few things that made that difficult for me. The 'first chapter' character trait lists...first off, the author misspelled 'trait'; secondly, having to wade through those was like needing to read a videogame manual cover-to-cover before getting to play. Just let me dive in, please! Initially, the story seems pretty shallow; the MC doesn't seem to have anything at stake, or deep motivation for what he's doing. Then it gets weird. Partly on purpose; there's a terrible tragedy in chapter three, though I struggled to understand exactly what *had* happened; the author showed us so little. But fine, it's a slow reveal that will be shared later. Except...the next paragraph, kicking off Chapter Four, talks about the MC's boyfriend. Back to the everyday of Chapters One and Two; I actually paged back to make sure I hadn't missed something. When I finally realized that I hadn't, and the author revealed that people had been kidnapped, I was even more confused. The MC doesn't mention this at all...I get that it's been a year, but...it's his own family, right? Still not sure, to be honest. The dark nature of the story isn't, in my opinion, especially well teased in the Summary, and definitely not in the first two chapters - a Prologue teasing the true nature of the tale might be a strong addition...? Basically - I'm still not sure if the story is really about the dark disappearance, or the M/M love story, but I don't think the author can get away with both."
