Wielders of Magic Book:1

"I really enjoyed this book! The spelling was off some though but I understood it. I would enjoy reading more in this series by the author Ray Dread"

Good story

"Love reading this story. It's been good from the beginning and kept me reading every page written. Can't wait for more from this writer."

Intriguing

"The book is pretty interesting! I think that there could be some improvements here and there, other than that, it is pretty good."

Great

"Great story so far really interesting story "

Wielded of Magic, Book 1: A Spellbinding...

"Amazing, I wanted to cry when it is done "

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Never Old

"I've read the story like 3 times and each time I find that hasn't gotten old reading from the start (hope to finish reading this time, before getting side tracked again)! It's really well written and thrilling to read! I love how you describe you characters and how you bring them together! Well done! And thanks for a great read!"

This is Epic!

"This is truly one of those great books that I could see being turned into a movie later in life. I love it. I'm madly in love with your characters right now. Jackson (one of my favorite names btw) is much like his last name, Spellbinding. This is a splendid novel and I'm so excited to read what comes next."

Brilliant!

"I love the whole idea of people hunting down magic users and killing them, the secrecy and suspense of it. It was quite exciting. And I liked the interaction between Jack, the Red Witch, and the old lady in the cottage. Both the plot and characters was very well done. I marked it down because in a lot of places you used the wrong word (for example, week instead of weak.) and there were also quite a few grammatical errors. If you go back and fix those, it will look much more professional. Good work!"

Enjoyable

"The plot thickens with every chapter, wondering how many more family members are out there"

The red witch

"Too many different pov's make the story hard to follow. Alot of wrong words used, for instance word instead of world. The story itself is entertaining, but seems to have missing info, such as where do dragons fit in. They are magical beasts being used by witch hunters?"

Brenda

"Very interesting "

Wielders of. Magic

"It takes alot for me to get interested in a book. And I have to say im really enjoying this one. It keeps you so intrigued to keep on reading. I'm really enjoying this book. And I'm more a crime thriller person. So for me I have to say that I really do enjoy the book "

Weilders of Magic, Book 1

"Many grammatical errors. Can't wait to read the next two books. Many twists and turns. Maybe could have expanded some fight sequences. Very good read overall as I had a hard time putting the book down."

An interesting world

"Alright! Looks like you have a real interesting world built up here and some great characters. I’ve always been a fan of fantasy style stories, so this was right up my alley. I really like how you have a character in the Red Witch that is far from in control of her powers. Allows you to really build on that character and have her grow as the story continues. Now, onto some things I think you could consider to improve your story. One thought I had very early on. Wielders of magic are not permitted inside of the town, but Jackson still uses and is known by the name Spellbinder? It might be more prudent for him to go by a pseudonym, or at least change his name so it doesn’t allude to magic. When the hunter discovers the spell book he gasps, then everyone gasps against almost immediately and it breaks the flow a little bit. May want to consider making a small change so it reads less awkward. Also, one thing to watch is over using terms like “signature” or “usual.” In chapter 11 you put “Muffin ran around her, as she usually did, and Jackson sighed as usual” and then shortly after that you had Arthur and his ‘signature grin.’ The readers will come to notice that the characters do certain things on their own, so you don’t have to point them out too often. The story seems very interesting and I think you have a good start, but you’re doing a lot of telling and not enough showing. You tell me that the Red Witch wants to learn to control her power, but I don’t see enough of that from her, only from what the narrator says."

Gritty, Fast-Paced Fantasy

"The storytelling in this piece sounds fresh and exciting, even though it could be just another "wizards and witches" story. What saves it are the characters, who are a little more hardened, cynical, and world-weary than we normally find in this genre. I also like the sense that magic has been hounded out of the world, and has to survive in the cracks, under constant surveillance and suspicion. The narrative voice is very strong and has a good sense of pace, introducing us to each character right “in the middle of things,” rather than explaining who this is, where they came from, etc. I love how one story immediately slips into the other, so we get both characters in a moment of crisis. What a way to begin! The use of magic is exciting and well described, and the short paragraphs add to the feverish pace of the narrative. It’s all very nail-biting and keeps the story moving at a great clip, though never at the expense of the story or so more thoughtful moments. I particularly like the scene where they save Drusilla, and we get it first from one perspective, then the other, all in the same chapter. Very clever and well-written. Right now, the main criticism of this story is a lack of editing that could make it sound a bit punchier and more grammatically sound. There is a general misuse of apostrophes and possessives: “stories” comes out as “story’s,” “Drusilla’s” is simply “Drusillas,” and “what’s this?” comes out as “whats this?” Also, some colloquial speech creeps into the story, such as this moment: “He wracked his brain, searching for anything that could of triggered something so terrible.” In normal speech we sometimes say “could of,” but the phrase is literally “could have.” In a modern story this could pass, maybe, but in fantasy it brings us out of the story and makes us hear the 21st century behind it all in a jarring way. I think the dialogue could sound more real as well: right now, it can sound a bit stilted, like book speech (though there are times when it sounds ‘real’ too). Try to read it out loud and experiment...ironically, your narrative can sound too colloquial, and your dialogue can sound too bookish. :) So in short, a fantastic story that just needs some sentence-level editing to make it sound like the glorious, galloping narrative that it is. The grammatical errors and dialogue are like little pot holes, bumping us around when the ride should—and usually is—silky smooth. But this is easily fixed and will make this story a work to watch on Inkitt and elsewhere!"

A Good Read!

"Going through it, it was a little confusing at first but the story in itself is good. It shows different sides of magic - the divine spectrum, arcane spectrum and, the dark spectrum which really shows the characters' personalities. Going through the chapters so far, the plotline seems to be good as well - the whole hunting down the witches thing. It's a modern depiction of the Salem Witch Hunts which is something worth looking at."

Must Admit

"I must admit that there is a huge change in the story by you having incorporated the first two chapters I had read, and changing it so drastically! It's better, by far better, than before! Congrats! (As for Grammar I must say that there is no problems, a few things you only need to double check, but nothing that deters the flow of reading!) Advice I keep in the review is for you to remember: A story should firstly have no flaws with it's writer before they can truly be happy that readers will be able to enjoy it! And... Just work on getting your own personnel touch to shine through! It is like I read in the group chats where you explained that your characters are your very mirror image, that is a great start! You must be able to connect with each character to make sure their own personality show a certain uniqueness from each other, just make sure if they represent a part of you, don't let them blend too much that they feel like their the same characters! So keep at it and you will soon fit your pen name in no time! "Master_Writer!" - (Work on your style)"

Much improved

"Re-review I think that last review was very harsh, no intentions of discouragement! I changed my ratings, because it really deserves it after the drastic change that you made! The prologue has improved significantly and has become a very smooth read in which I was able to follow along with no trouble. It makes Chapter 1 make a lot more sense and smoother as well! I haven't mentioned this but I have to say that this story has favorable magical elements employed in it. Great job on the changes! I can't wait to read more, it's on my reading list!"

Interesting

"It was hard to read because of the characters, their reactions sometimes didn't have any sense and they would snap over nothing and turn their convictions as easy as one turns a pancake. the plot is good but the grammar needs improvement. if polished it could be a great story"