What is your opinion?
Fading Memories
"Beautiful story and cover! I liked the progression of how the characters were portrayed and how their inner emotions make us want to read on. I look forward to more chapters to come!"
Ouch! This is amazing!
"This hurt my heart; it was so good. I've just lost someone recently so this really resonated. I love the story, the style - you have a way of hooking people in so quickly. You're like a masterful fisherman with a pen instead of bait. You and your stories are brilliant!"
Emotional Piece
"This was a very emotional piece. I honestly loved it. It reminds me of so many relationships out there. They pull to want more from someone, but can never get it. This poor guy seems amazing and the girl just, in my opinion,is leading him on because she knows she can. It’s very well written for portraying that, but I wish this guy could see how much more he could feel with someone else. How is effort’s would be noticed. It would be so interesting to see his take on a healthy relationship instead of a toxic one. Otherwise, I absolutely left it and loved it for that, but I absolutely hate the girl for taking such advantage of a sweet human being."
Fading Memoried
"Wow... great emotion.... and ut was a short but awesome mystery ...one of love and loss and lonelinesd... good job...making me feel your words... instead of just reading 👍😘😋"
good but could be improved.
"I did not expect to be reading an emotional story, the emotions are portrayed very well in the first chapter despite it being short. however, I found it pretty confusing which is why I think you should use names instead of "her". I'm pretty sure the plot you have in your mind is great I just think you might have trouble putting your thoughts together and turning them into a story. I believe that if you practice more you'll improve greatly so don't be discouraged. your story just needs a good amount of editing and proofreading to become a better one."
Not-so-simple feelings
"I have to admit that I read this story casually and I didn't think too much through it. I got confused by her and "her". I thought they were the same person, but one of the comments said they were different women. I don't know if it's just me or some other readers feel confused too. I feel like you still can improve this story and add more details about the characters ad the situations that were happening and had happened.. The fact that the main character had been at the hospital, even giving his pocket money was interesting enough to explore. You might want the readers to know more about your main character. Anyway, keep writing! Regards, Kei Angelus"
