What is your opinion?
Please May I Have Some More?
"I took one star off for plot because I NEED TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS. Pardon me for yelling :-D Is there more? Is there any way this can be published somewhere? Good luck!"
A Shiny Firefly Story!
"After your more than gracious review of my story, I couldn't help but fire back! Of all my competition, your story is by far my favorite. Your clear love of the 'Verse and crisp understanding of the lore is evident throughout. Your portrayal of Wash's anguish at the loss of his crew made me feel stuff... I swear to you, I got very choked up. Honestly, there could've been tears. ;) Plus, you successfully used the word "slunk" so you're my hero. It's doubly exciting to learn that this is a part of a larger novel! You've sold at least one copy of that, right here. Also, your bid for writerly camaraderie has won my undying loyalty. I voted for you. Like a fool. :) I want you in the top 3 with me, so if it comes to it, I'll rally my crew on your behalf as well. Best of luck, my new friend! Don't be a stranger and keep flying!"
Dark but essential reading
"A very dark story, isn't it, but very powerful, and of course it could have happened. Your characterizations are spot on as ever. Loved how Wash still remembers enough of his previous life to tell the Reaver to get out of his chair. Am glad I read this, thanks for submitting."
Loved it!!
"I think anyone who has loved Firefly/Serenity and bemoaned Wash's untimely death would love for him to return...in any capacity! Of course, I pray that whatever alterations/conditioning the Reavers did with him can be reversed/overcome with the love and support of his crew and wife...at least, that's what I imagine would happen. :) This is fantastic Alana...I loved it!"
Very polished!
"An excellent story, polished all around. Plot, style, structure, characters, and dialogue have all been worked very carefully. Maybe expand the male characters more in future. Looking forward to seeing future iterations.. Great job!"
Why No More?
"I know this is written for the Con Man contest, but your story could go much further given how it is abruptly ended as a teaser. Your skill definitely shows in your descriptions of the atmosphere and mood of the story and the emotions of the characters. Well done, indeed."
Hawkgal08
"Shiny!!!!!!!!! Dark and Lovely. My heart breaks for Wash. Your story is very well done and very true to the characters. I'm always so amazed by your brain when you share your words with us. I'm short and sweet with my reviews. I'm sorry."
So wrong, so right.
"This is just wonderful. Disturbingly wonderful. I hate it, and at the same time love it. Not too complex, just very easy-reading with a fascinating twist. Very nicely played. :) Would love to read more, if there's ever a sequel. :-D"
Lovely Autumn Flower
"Even though I am not familiar with the roots of this story, it drew me in with its flowing writing. It was descriptive without being flowery. And while I couldn't decipher Wash's affiliations, I"m intrigued and would love to read on. Nicely done, Alana!"
Reviews for "Serenity After Miranda: Autumn Flower"
"Dark and so very glorious. Thanks for sharing your brain! I am impressed by how your mind works and the stories you can tell. My heart breaks for Wash. And Zoe. And all of them. And some kind of hope. :)"
Autumn flower - serenity
"I liked the concept of filling the gap in the story and the intimations of a major reveal coming later. Wash's upset and disorientation are well-realised and his view that everyone else is dead (when we know they are not) is still a hard tug at the heartstrings."
Alan's Dream
"Everyone would have loved to see a different end for Wash. This story has gritty moments and moments that will give joy to fans, especially fans of Alan Tudyk. The Characters are well portrayed and the ending satisfactory. Enjoy!"
Wow
"Loving this story!! I still miss this show so much, and it's always awesome when a great story with these characters shows up. And this is a great story. I’m trying not to cry thinking about Wash, but that last bit with River and Mal has me thinking good thoughts."
Good stuff!
"Short and punchy, but with a terribly good bite, this is the Firefly story I didn't know I wanted. Reads like the epilogue to Serenity (or maybe the beginning of a part 2). It’s a well-written, tight story, and just a little terrifying."
@MakeItAPlatter
"This is a fantastically, fun story that stays true to the characters I love so much. This is a very creative premise that builds on canon yet explores new avenues. Her story is really well done and deserves to be recognized."
Serenity After Miranda: Autumn Flower
"Shiny! (You knew that had to be said!) Excellent job capturing the tone and intent of the original series, Alana. As your new scenes and situations unfolded, there were enough references to elements of the original that I felt at home, in comfortable territory, and in safe hands. It's what everyone wants in fan fiction: fresh narrative couched in familiarity. Your love for the characters is evident and shines through the prose."
Poor Wash
"I am so glad he still alive but I worry about him and Zoe when she find him someday. I think she want to love him still but maybe he forget her. Maybe it is worse if her he remembers. I like idea of River and Mal dress like Reavers and fool them. Can that back fire?"
Where to go
"It takes courage to paint such a dark future for a much loved character. Clearly this is just the beginning. Remember that Reavers are insanely tormented characters. Wash hasn't been exposed to the Miranda treatment so he wouldn't be calmly piloting a ship if he were a true reaver. He'd be flying way closer to the edge. There's no sanity left in a Reaver so it wouldn't be calmly filing teeth, it would be an obsessive behavior to demean himself still further. Just shooting the opposing pilot wouldn't be his approach unless he isn't a true reaver. Don't get me wrong, and I hope I'm not giving away a plot element. I like the potential of this story. I can't wait to see Mal's conflict knowing his perspective on reaver psychology, and the suggestion of conflict between the captain and loyal NCO. Mal will believe that Wash would be better off dead than continue as he is. River has already hinted he can be saved. Then there's the fact that Mal and Wash have both been tortured before by Miska - how does this impact Wash's chances? And then, there's love ... Great job, please finish it."
Looking good so far...
"Like the idea, and the story appears fairly tight, and fairly well aligned with the Serenity series. It feels like it could be a reasonably logical progression. The writing feels light and quirky enough to be a cultural fit. Would be interesting to see how this was developed."
