What is your opinion?
I love it
"Liked how they met "
Review
"I really like Esther's character. She seems reserved yet I think her character will develop quite a lot as the story goes on. Overall I think that this storyline and the characters will grow amazingly in the next chapters to come. I really enjoyed this book so far! Great work!"
Fashion show
"I like the way how Jack has a way of choosing his PA. And I really like Esther’s character in this book. A really great book. I saw a very few grammatical error, it that can be solved with a good editing. "
Great!
"This is really well written, the plot is so fun and entertaining! I don’t usually read on this app (I like writing better) but I find this story so interesting that Ill probably end up reading it to the end! Please make more, and great job!"
Beloved Queen Esther
"An attractive, dark haired woman named Esther feels like she’s simply wandering without purpose through life. Her uncle transported the entire family from Iran to America when she was a young child. After her parents die in a tragic car accident her uncle decides to raise his beautiful niece all by himself. Sometime after Esther’s twenty sixth birthday she learns that one of her favorite media figures, the handsome and wealthy Jack Rhodes is about to break his engagement with Vashti Wilmer. “Ahhh” says Esther’s uncle. “Now is the time to apply for a new P.A. position for Rhodes.” But is Esther up for the task? And will this shy beauty somehow worm her way into Rhode’s heart. I suspect this story maybe based on Esther that exists in the Bible. The plot beats seem similar to what goes on in the biblical chapter. If that’s the case I think it is a clever idea. I wish I had come up with it myself. It’s also fun to read about a beautiful character that doesn’t have blonde hair and blue eyes for a change (I’ve read about so many blonde hair/blue eyed characters to easily fill an entire Aryan Empire. Of course I should be the last one to be complaining. I’ve done it myself.) If I’m right about this novel being a modernized Esther, may I suggest writing more about the Vashiti character? I always found her a fascinating character in the Bible and wondered about her view point on things. At any rate this is a great start to a fascinating story. Can’t wait to read the next chapters. "
Esther
"Overall of the story good, like the story structure it's well done. I like that the FL is nice and not your typical girl, because by the descritption she is kind of overwheight. Didn't see mistakes and hope this story has a nice pace and development. The author is doing a nice job and can't wait to read more weell done!!"
Great Start!
"I really liked the plot of the story as well as the character dynamics. There were a few things I think needs improvement, but just reading out loud should help. The first would be your flow. There were several places where you repeated facts where it wasn't necessary. This was especially present in the beginning chapters. The second point would be working on the flow of dialogue. There were several places where the dialogue wasn't natural and did not flow. Again I find rereading it out loud helps me. The third would be that, especially during the first few chapters, your plot felt rushed. you can slow things down with a little more descriptions here and there. At least that is what I do. Other than that I really liked it."
4/5 🌟
"Things I think you did well on: (-) Cover (-) Paragraph Formation (-) Grammar/Spelling Things I think you could improve on: (-) Dialogue Your characters don't really talk like they're human. It's like they're reading off a script. (-) Summary The entire second half of the summary is poorly written, in my opinion. If I were scrolling through the site for a book to read, I don't think I would have chosen this one. This is a shame because the book is good. (-) Clarity You repeated some things that did not need to be repeated. Work on making it flow, and not choppy. (-) Chapter Titles Some are capital letters, and some are lowercase. Chose either or and stick with it."
Esther
"Wow!I loved the story . It is very unique and different. Your writing style is descriptive and vivid. Great work 👏"
So far so good
"I'm enjoying it so far, will come back to read the next chapters when they are uploaded. 😊"
