What is your opinion?
Much Entertaining
"I've just finished reading it, though it's still a work in progress. This was a really great story where a college girl Zunaira accidentally involves herself with a murder case. I really can't wait to see what happens in the future. It's that much enjoying! However, it's a bit fast paced and I don't mind it, though it'd be great if there were some details on emotional explanations. And, lastly some grammatical errors are there, but it's nothing editing can't fix. I'm really hoping for this story. Keep up the good work :)"
Gripping Narrative!
"You are a very talented storyteller, in that you keep the reader engaged from start to finish (well, at least to where you've written so far). I'm still craving more and I love the plot line in general. Once edited, this'd be perfect. Nice work!!"
Cool!
"Cool story!"
Awsome!
"Keep up the good work!"
What I didn't really like was that you put the meaning of the Islamic word at the end of the chapter instead of putting it on the same sentence
"What I didn't really like was that you put the meaning of the Islamic word at the end of the chapter instead of putting it on the same sentence I would recommend this novel to all my friends because it's amazing "
Wounded stranger
"The book so far is very intense, looking forward to seeing what happens with the rest of the story. Hopefully he gets what he has coming to him."
Good Read
"I really enjoyed meeting your characters and the world you have set it in. I think this story is quite intriguing and gets you in quickly. I am keen to know how it will all turn out??? I look forward to more from this author, more on this story and others as well. I wish you all the best with your writing :-)"
Revenge Diaries
"The story is action-packed and keeps readers on edge. I enjoyed reading it, but there are some grammatical errors. The characters are lovely and realistic and the drama scenes are written superbly. The setting is unique. I think this novel has a great base and can't wait to read more."
Intriguing and action-packed
"I'm really interested in this story, thus far! From just a few chapters, I've enjoyed the distinct characters and quick responses, as well as the witty dialogue. I also LOVE the title too; it really centers in on the plot. This story has a lot of potential, and my only criticism is to maybe fix a few formatting and grammar issues, but that's about it! Great story so far!"
Lots of potential
"This is a lively, exciting st0ry with clear characters and snappy dialogue. It needs a close edit but I would enjoy reading the completed novel. Congratulations on a good start."
Revenge Diaries
"This story is a work in progress, which is good because I WANT TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT! I need to know what happens to each of the characters and how their story is changed. This story keeps me on the edge of my seat and I didn't want to put it down. On the downside, the writing became a little bit difficult to understand due to the change in English and UK spelling. Other than that, the story was totally worthwhile!"
Great Potential
"This story features a well written villain, who kills with such dispassion and lack of emotion that his cold-blooded nature creates a chilling effect in all the scenes presented from his point of view. It has a decided language gap with American and UK spelling, grammar and sentence structure, but is understandable enough for anyone to read and enjoy. With some editing by a professional, it could be a very successful piece. The novel is unfinished, but the suspense between the main characters, who have witnessed the murderer in action and the protagonist of the story are appropriately tense and anxiety-inducing. Great start to an interesting story!"
Very good
"Love the plot"
Revenge Diaries
"I really like the plot of this story. I think it is very promising! But, there are some things I noticed some things you might want to reflect upon. Firstly, the title of the story doesn't seem to match the cover, but the cover seems to match the summary. And then, I can't really see any connection between the title and the summary. Maybe you did this on purpose and this shall be explained later in the story? Secondly, I couldn't see the relation between the title of the first chapter and its contents... unless, by "Fairy Land", you meant college. If this is so, then it all makes sense and you're good. Thirdly, I think the scenes are changing way too fast in the story. For instance, that part where my main character gets a dare? I would put that in the first or the third chapter. In the first chapter, I'd just leave it to her meeting with the girl bullies (that's what I'm assuming they are) and the main character probably meeting friendlier people and such. I think that's all. I found minor grammatical errors, which I've already pointed out to you. All the best for your story!"
Ready to see what happens next.
"Revenge Diaries has a great plot. What I really like about the story although it is a work in progress is it keeps you wanting to know what happens next especially to the killer. Another aspect that I like is that the author incorporates aspects of a different culture that I'm not accustomed to and I haven't seen in other books. I can't wait to see how the story ends."
Chilling From Beginning to End
"This is a very chilling story from beginning to end. I was able to read it with ease within a couple of hours, and the cultural word banks I found very helpful. Please put astrics on those words so that it will be an even more helpful reference as the reader reads. There are punctuation errors, but not enough to interrupt the flow of the story. Overall I think there is a great story beginning to develop and I can't wait to read more."
There were a few formatting problems
"The story switched between the girl and the boy rather quickly and I never really had a chance to get used to the chapters. I would maybe consider adding a little more material to each person's chapter. The dialogue is sometimes hard to follow, mostly in the second chapter where it jumps a bit. I understand that you're from the Middle East so I'm trying to give some leeway for the grammar and punctuation (especially since your English is much better than most native speakers :) ) but the story could use some editing. Overall I'm excited about the idea of the story but nothing really held my interest. But that's just me!"
