What is your opinion?
It was such a great story but i didn't like the ending
"I didnt like the ending.I'd recommend this to my best friend."
Keep writing pls .
"This is one of the best mystery story I've read on inkitt , the epilogue or chapter 0 caught my attention, pls author continue writing , and update 😭"
Long Gone
"The story was great and mysterious.. I loved it.. Waiting for the update!! "
i love it
"oh my gosh, i really love your story, everything about it is just right, from the details to the story like, i could literally picture everything in my mind and then the mystery hmhmhm, it felt so right. i cant wait for the next chapter"
Review of Long Gone
"Annie Garcia, beloved resident of Reapermore, has died under mysterious circumstances. Why does nobody want to approach the death? She's a beloved resident. Then we're suddenly at some point before June 21st. It's a harsh transition, and you could have paced it more. Annie was dead, and then suddenly she's alive and well with Ava. I understand that you're trying to provide backstory, but space it out. You don't want to give away too much information at once. So when you write dialogue, you want to make all the dialogue and speaking tags a separate paragraph. This makes it easier to read. For example, I'll use the dialogue in your story: Annie and Ava were walking from school back home. "Are you excited for the trip?" Annie asked. "Of course I am. This is going to be so fun!" Ava said. (Remember to put punctuation at the end of your dialogue as well.) "No parents to boss us around and nothing to stop us from going!" Annie exclaimed. Also, you don't need to put speaking tags (asked, said, exclaimed, shouted, etc.) at the end of every line of dialogue. Every once in a while is okay, but try not to do it too often. This goes for character names too. Readers can tell who is speaking most of the time, but if you think it's unclear as to who is speaking, add the name in. Otherwise you don't have to do it after every line of dialogue. Again? Annie's done this more than once? So Ava runs outside and just yells for Annie? Do they live near each other? I'm not sure I understand why Ava just decided to fling herself out the door and start yelling if she didn't think that Annie could hear her. We find Annie's body in a shallow pit, and did they know that she was dead on the scene? If so, why did they take her to the hospital? I'm glad she spoke at the funeral despite not wanting to attend in the first place. Ava is obviously hurt and in denial over her best friend's death, but I felt that all these scenes moved rather quickly. Suddenly Ava was looking for Annie and then they found her and then they buried her and suddenly she's come back from the dead? Again, I think you need to pace this story a little better. Maybe start with Ava and Annie's excited conversation about going to Greece, then the panic over her disappearing, then the introductory paragraph about her funeral. It gives the readers time to get introduced to the main characters, get attached to them and then feel something at having something happen to them. You want your readers to become attached to your characters so that the effect of losing one has an impact. That's (part of) what makes a good story. So the "we were supposed to stay together forever" thing. I'm not sure I understand. It wasn't established previously that they had made some sort of pact or promise to one another to do such a thing. Is Annie upset that Ava allowed her to die by parting way when they're walking home from school? That would make sense if Annie was afraid of dying but I don't see any evidence suggesting that. Emma? Who's Emma? Again, I think some pacing would have helped. Maybe when Ava finds out that Annie is dead, she goes "oh no, not like Emma" or something else. It's just enough mystery to keep readers intrigued but doesn't give too much away at the same time. If this is a recurring theme in Reapermore, tell us. I guess Reapermore doesn't believe in ghosts, despite its name, if Ava is convinced that Annie is still alive. Why would Ava have reason to believe that others know that Annie is alive? Wouldn't that be a good thing? Then Claire and Aaliyah just start talking about her in the bathroom. I know that this scene was supposed to make Ava feel stressed, to know that there are people who are cold and indifferent to something that should be a very big event in her life. It's sort of a power imbalance. But is this group of girls going to be included later on in the story? I'd like to know if maybe they know more than they let on about the death. Ava's grieving, so I understand her not wanting company. But she catches on fairly quickly that her classmates were not just there to keep her company, even though they said they were. Again, this scene went too fast. Maybe they could've sat down with her and tried really hard to make conversation, but found that they didn't know Ava at all? It makes for awkward tension and would reinforce the idea that Ava doesn't want pity. I'm guessing that the spokesperson for the class had a crush on Ava, but why didn't you introduce him properly? I feel like he'd be important. So in the final scene, Ava just makes a snap decision to leave flowers at her friend's grave? What motivated that? You would think that that would be a planned visit. I'm guessing that Annie is some kind of zombie? I want to know."
Mysterious
"Got the appealing of mysterious. Author did her out most. Minor needs to be fixed and that can be done, it will be an interesting book, which got to say it got my attention. Mystery is something I like and hope to see twists and turns of who did all this. so keep it up author!"
Long gone
"I enjoy the story very much it's not boring it keeps you interested and wanting to know what is going to happen next it's not the kind of book you lose interest in after a chapter or two now that I am at a spot where I have to wait for the update it makes me wish I would never have started it "
Long Gone
"Truth be said, this is not the regular genre of story which I'd prefer reading. You need to pay attention to the punctuations and your grammer. The plot can thicken in the future, so I'd tell you to ease and flow with it. It has potential. Keep writing. "
This has a Twilight Zone feel to it!
"I really enjoyed this story. I heard Rod Serling from The Twilight Zone in my head as I read it. There are some good mysterious qualities to the story, and the voice she hears is a nice spooky addition. Nice job and keep updating!"
Good Start
"I like the beginning of the novel so far. I see where you might plan to go with the story, but I think this could unfold pretty interestingly. There are some instances of punctuation and grammar issues, but nothing is perfect. Some of the sentences and paragraphs doesn't always flow and feels a little choppy to me. Some details feel a little out of place and I also caution against using the same word a few times in a paragraph/sentence because it can feel repetitive/deter some. For a first novel on here and for a beginning, it's a good start and I can't wait to see where you are going with this story."
Mysterious and cunning
"The introduction to the story is very interesting. We are shown a vague every day-like the relationship between the two girls, things are serene until they're suddenly not. I think you could have made it better by making the contrast about how things suddenly fell apart more emotional and traumatic for the reader, it would have given it more impact. Furthermore, it would have been interesting to see more glimpses of Anne and Ava's relationship. It would have made the reader connect with the characters. The dialogues are vague and the paragraphs can be spaced to give readers a better experience, but apart from that, I have no complaints. The story was unique and fresh, the mood and atmosphere is also quite dark but enjoyable. Well done, keep writing, it'll surely pay off!"
Interesting Story
"Ooo, the suspense... it’s a great start! I love the tension of this book. One detail I would add is that there are some misspelled words and minor grammar mistakes. But other than that it’s a real solid start. Keep it up!"
