What is your opinion?
A lovely start!
"(Ongoing, read til the end of chapter 3) This was a really sweet start! There's something about it that hooked me instantly and drew me in. The characters are coming across strongly already, especially Yuki - she's compassionate, friendly, passionate about literature, and her interactions with her friends and family were wholesome and realistic; it was entertaining and .very engaging to read. Tis only the third chapter, so I'll add to this review as I read on; but really good job so far; looking forward to more :)"
Yuki Yuki
"Yuki Yuki is a very cute story with a lot of potential. It's of a few different people's lives and they wind into each other's views in different ways. What I will mention is that there were a lot of easily remedied errors such as missing commas or paragraphs that need to be broken up. I will say that the characters are very cute and believable, but separating the paragraphs into different people's descriptions or what they're saying will help the story read better. Also, if you are doing more than one person's POV (point of view), try to mark that person's POV. I've been using hyphens and the person's name and putting them in bold to set it off from the story. Now, all constructive criticism aside, I enjoyed reading this and will definitely try to pop in when the author adds more."
Yuki Yuki
"This is such a cute story so far. It reminds me of an anime from the names and even some of the dialogue. The concept of trying to fit in during high school, along with also adapting to change is something many people, especially people on here, can relate to. Now, there are quite a bit of grammatical/punctuation errors. When referencing the name of a long text like book, movie, video game, play etc. you need to put it italics. There were a number of missing commas. When ending a piece of dialogue, there needs to be a comma unless the sentence ends with a question mark or exclamation point. Also, detail is your best friend. Especially if you have a lot of characters, and introduce them all at once. Try adding some descriptions about the characters, like how they look, it helps the readers keep them straight. Also try and add more detail as a whole. It'll help engage readers and build an image in their heads. Sorry for the long review, but I do hope it helps any. You've got a good story here so far. Keep up the good work! Keep writing!"
So Cute!!!!!!
"Sometimes, stories take a little while to attract the reader but this one does it almost instantly. I really loved the sibling relationship between Ryu and Yuki. It can be a little hard to keep track of all the names with Hina and Hana, but because the character development was good, it makes sense after a bit. Really good Mean Girls moment, super relatable. It would really help if you went into each character's backstory a bit, but I love it. Keep Writing xxx"
Fun story
"The blurb was quite interesting, you gave a well-rounded idea of what the book is about. However, once I started reading, it was a bit confusing since the characters were all introduced very quickly. You might want to consider taking a slower pace in bringing new characters so readers don't get overwhelmed by the information. Good work so far!"
Adorable!
"This is extremely well written and connects with you immediately! I can't wait for more updates :) Happy writing!"
Has potential
"Well, it's only one chapter so I can't really say much about it. However, here are the things I loved. The first thing, I love the blurb, how you've talked about the efforts of a girl into fitting in despite her pressure and fallouts with her friends. I like your selection of characters but I somehow felt like many characters were introduced at once so I got kinda confused somewhere. Maybe it's because I'm not really used to these names as you've assigned the characters so I couldn't differentiate one character from the other but maybe you might want to introduce the characters slowly, only a few at a time so that the readers get used to the idea first. Well that's what I think. Other than the small grammar errors here and there, I feel that your storyline is strong and has a potential to do a lot better! Would be waiting for more chapters! Good job! ❣❣"
🤩🤩
"The story is good. The starting if the story was not very strong but as it proceed it became good. I like the character and the plot. Good work!!"
Cute Yuki Yuki!
"I'm not usually a fan of high school stories because they're often cliche and unrealistic, but this one is really good! The characters are cute, relatable, realistic, and believable. It's a really cute story overall, and attention-grabbing. For a story with only three chapters so far, it's great that the readers get hooked so easily! There are quite a few grammatical errors, however, such as misplaced commas and missing italics. They aren't so prevalent that they detract from the story, but I would still recommend fixing them. The introductions of the characters were also slightly confusing because so many were introduced at once. I recommend having a slower introduction, but not so slow that it's boring. I love the fact that you included cats, they're honestly underappreciated. I mostly clicked on this story because cats were in the description, and I wasn't disappointed! Overall, great story, plot, and characters, just work on the grammar. :) (PS The cover is super cute!)"
Teen fiction
"I would definitely classify this story under teen fiction. Good punctuation and grammar. Overall cute."
