What is your opinion?
Fragile things
"It is a strong start, though I can't offer a full opinion on the plot yet based on this one chapter. However, you already manage to describe your characters perfectly through their mannerisms, setting them apart from each other. That is really difficult to do so early on, but you did it well! Technically, I couldn't find any flow. I'm looking forward to seeing where you go with this! Keep up the great work!"
Fragile Things
"Since it's the beginning I can't say much but for the start it is pretty good. The plot is nothing different but it is written beautiful. The character development is also good. I think it is too cliché for my liking but it's just the start. Waiting for more. "
Great Work ❤
"Since it's only two chapters so it will be difficult to say anything now regarding where the story goes.. The plotline is maybe a bit cliche but since I love cliches, so it ain't a problem for me ❤ But in these two chapters, I loved your writing style. It's beautiful and sophisticated. Making Eleanor a strong female lead is great work since I'm a sucker of strong FL. Overall, I didn't find any major grammatical errors or anything. They're pretty perfect ❤ It's an overall amazing work Keep Writing ❤"
Great Take
"It's not an absolutely unique beginning, but in this day and age, that would be hard to find. The language, writing style is great. Very rarely am I able to completely just delve completely in the story because I am so often held back by the style of writing. This was definitely one of those times. I am thankful you empowered Eleanor, formerly so quiet, in the second chapter. It may be a personal preference but I am a sucker for quiet female main character's who reach boiling point and actually react, instead of pushing it all the way back down. Extra points for making Max so triggering, I wanted to punch him too because of what he said about Simon. In paragraph 13 on your first chapter, there seems to be an incomplete sentence that looks like a typo. Overall, I would definitely come back to reading this after this review. I'd like to see where Eleanor ends up :)"
Pretty good so far!
"So far, I think this story had an interesting start, and your characters were all pretty interesting as well. Oh boy, though, having someone cheating on you is definitely not pretty, especially that jerkwad, Max. Ellie sure is lucky, though, to have good friends at her side! As I read this, though, I did notice some grammar mistakes that could use some fixing, and some words could've also been replaced with something else to make it look better. Overall though, I think you did a pretty good job with this. So keep it up, looking forward to more of this!"
So, Fragile Things
"The overall plot/storyline isn't particularly original, but I genuinely enjoyed the story so far. I like the main character and her friends, and I think your dialogue is quite good. The grammar and punctuation are good, and the pace was about perfect. Good luck, and good job!"
Great story plot
"The writing style is good. I love how you build your characters already in the first chapter. I notice some words were misused. I am not really into the typical teenage romance, but I give credit where it’s due the descriptions are well written. I did see you said Ellie and Max were together a year, then went to a three, then a few months; that part is a little confusing. I wish you the best in this novel. Keep up the excellent work! "
