What is your opinion?
Other Side
"Quite the beginning of a love story. Very promising."
Please Keep Me Posted
"I absolutely love how this story is going so far. The author is amazing and very, very talented. Would recommend. 100/10"
Review
"I enjoyed the story I liked all the main characters being played. Great work!"
Very interesting
"I'm compelled to follow. Love where it's headed so far and the writer does a great job of hooking the reader!"
LOVE IT
""
Good read 👍
"Very good first story, long but good!. Very detailed which I think helps you picture scenes in a book more precisely. I like the fact that it's a book with a variety of different stories as you don't get many of those however I would maybe keep them a little shorter! Other than that keep it up ☺️"
Great Concept!
"A fabulously rousing start to a collection of works that will surely keep you turning, scrolling, and swiping pages. The author is great at using charade ambiguity to actually advance the story. You love people you don't fully know, and it's amazing how it is done. Looking forward to seeing how the concept will be further developed, and who we will eventually meet. "
Amazing!
"I really liked this book! Keep up the great work!! "
Very interesting ❤️❤️
"I thoroughly enjoyed reading this book and I loved the tension in relationship the two characters had and it was holding in the suspense on wanting to know more ❤️👏👏👏 Great going and keep on writing👏👏👏 It’s awesome…!!!!❤️❤️❤️"
Beautiful!
"I loved the way you narrated the happenings and how easy you made it to see and feel things from her point of view. I'd love to see how this book goes!"
The other side
"I am very blown away by how good of a writer you are. Each scene is being narrated in such a well thought out way. I do feel like you and I have another thing in common besides the punctuation thing. The fact that we both put in an awkward sentence here and there. It's no biggie, it can be a little difficult to arrange your thoughts at times for sure. Sometimes it takes me a while to figure out how I want to walk my reader through the next part. I think you are an amazing writer and I definitely want to keep reading your book. Way to go! "
The Other Side
"I really liked the story 💜❤️💜 Although it had me confused some times, I think it was worth a read 👍💞👍 However, I do suggest maybe you could put paragraphs to separate the sentences and let the readers read your story easier 😊😊 Also, I think you misspelled vibes in your story, just pointing it out for ya 😉😉 For the first chapter, it sure was pretty lengthy and because of that, I think your story is quite different from most novels here since novels usually make kind of a short chapter for the first one 😁😁 Alright, byeeeeeeeee 👋🦋💕 -Kookie 🍪💕"
Great job
"Although I’ve only gotten to read one chapter of this book so far, I am already super interested to figure out what happens next! I love the plot, will continue reading for sure!"
Temptations
"An intensive start wrapped up in a righteous ending. I love it, the way she resisted the temptation and chose to do the right thing at the end. Kudos to that. Though, I would have loved to know more about the husband and why there seemed to be a lack of passion between the couple. A few punctuation mistakes here and there, but overall it has potential. Keep up with the good work! "
Character
"What can I say, you described so well your scenes. I like how it really brings the conflict between the two characters and I really admire their working chemistry. Even though he is of higher working standards than her, she compliments his character. I think your book needs more chapters as I love the plot already. A few mistakes here and there, but nothing you cannot undo with dedicated editing. Keep reaching for greatness and complete your book would work out for the best! Congrats!"
Mysterious man
"Great Job writing the dialog you did a FANTASTIC job at that. I do feel it was a bit long and confusing at times with too little detail. This story, even though I know it meant to be one chapter only, at times it felt a bit fast paced. You do have AMAZING passion which is evident in your writing. I felt you could of done so much more with this piece. As your reader it's as if I'm itching to know more, what happens between the gaps you left? What does she find so alluring about him? What attracts her to him? The mystery in this piece is So REAL. What's his name? Give me something that makes me feel just as infatuated with this man as our protagonist. A little small detail. HOWEVER, all in all YOU DID A SPECTACULAR job. I NEED MORE!!! Keep UP THE GREAT WORK!!♡"
👏👏
"you have real potential to grow more in writing. I loved the concept of the story but I'd like to see more of understanding between them in enemies to lovers, office romance, in their work relationship as well. She seems like an ambitious girl who knows her work while he is similar but strict. I liked the sequence of events. This could be an entire book if you split it in chapters and describe more on the small situations. It was exciting and had me rooting for more! Well done! :-) "
The Other Side
"Interesting and unique. I think every author should have a unique writing style...and you definitely do. Can't wait to see what you write next. Good job!"
Fauziya
"Hey! I really really like this book. I mean, go girl :) the writing style is almost everything I want mine to become. I’m defs going to reread this later when sleep is not blocking half of my vision. But I love the plot and I can’t wait to continue reading the rest of the book! "
The Other Side
"What I'm going to write here is my personal opinion, so you can take it or leave it. I like the vibe of your story and I find myself engaged and wanting to read more and know more about the protagonists. The chapter is too long for a first chapter. To be honest with you, it was a bit confusing for me at first. I thought that the male protagonist is both the female's boss at work and husband at home, until I learned later that she's married and trying her best not to get involved in a love affair with the male protagonist. While reading, I wondered how they both looked like, what kind of work they are doing, and what their names are. I noticed you named a minor character (Lara) but both the male and female protagonists are nameless. The plot would be easier to follow if they have names. The descriptions are vivid good, but pay attention to redundancy and don't go deep into describing actions of characters because that doesn't leave imagination for the reader. Technically, there are no spelling mistakes. There are grammar mistakes and word confusion that can be easily fixed through editing. Pay attention to switches between past and present tense (it'll be challenging to find those because they aren't a lot) Some words miss articles "a" and "the". Some questions miss question marks, and pay attention to point and comma usage. Sometimes it should be a comma instead of a point (and that's why there are incomplete sentences) and sometimes vice-versa. You can cut off someone using an em-dash (—) and the elipsis are only three points (. . .) There are those lengthy words like "Gooooooooodddd" you can easily replace it with "God!" and follow it with a strong tagging verb. Dialogue punctuation, tags, and action beats: cases on how dialogues should be punctuated. -If the sentence is a statement: "I made coffee," he/she/they/I/my mother etc... said. (Note the comma and no capitalization) -If the sentence is a question or exclamation. "Do you want coffee?" he asked. "Wow! You look so beautiful!" he commented. - If the dialogue is followed by action beat: "I made coffee." He reached for two mugs from the cupboard (capitalization and point) For more visit https://thewritelife.com/dialogue-tags/ ? and ! don't exist together or more than once. (No ?! !? ?? or !!) Your story has a good potential, and with a bit of editing, it'll shine even more! Keep writing! :)"
