What is your opinion?
Great potential.
"I’ve never read a manuscript before, but as a first, I can say that this is a good one, in my opinion. I like the fantasy elements, and your dialogue is great. I do recommend paying close attention to punctuation, and the flow of your story, however. All and all, I think your work has great potential, and I would love to read it again once you’ve completed, and edited it. ❤️ Thank you for reaching out, I really enjoyed reading your manuscript. "
The almighty voyage
"From reading four chapters I am able to surmise two things. This is a two dimensional story and this is an imaginary world with no limits. From the first chapter the royal knights charge a dragon. None of the knights have names. Just 1- whatever. In chapter 3 you name a bunch of soldiers for the next voyage, but I feel that is late. Your king would be better off having 2-3 trusted men with unique personalities from the offset. The council members also need names. It always seems like the weather is always bright and sunny. The part where the three ladies approach King Orion feels off. The women lose their husbands, but we're given the choice to be given their husbands corpse's in exchange for being combines, a king would not give them a choice he would just take them, one woman should escape to happen on King Orion, she should be ragged and tired, the point is I have to feel for their struggle. You have a solid plot and you have the terminology for this genre down. You have interesting action scenes maybe more world building. At the end of the day you got me to turn to the fifth chapter so you have a story that is desirable. That said you are only seven chapters in so I look forward to how you fill in the rest of this story. Good job and keep typing I would love to see this on a shelf one day."
Great story
"The story itself is well written and engaging. This needs a thorough grammatical edit and it would be up there with the best of them. A free flowing narrative, had me wanting to read on. Great stuff"
Interesting story
"I'm not really into fantasy but I really like this story so far. Your plot is great but it will help readers to understand if you put " " when someone is conversing. It just gets a little bit confusing there but other than that it's great. I wish you all the best. Keep going. ××priya××"
The Almighty Voage Review
"A very, VERY intriguing story that I just got done reading. The Almighty Voyage has elements that I could totally see in a modern day Fantasy tv show. The author of this book gets right to the point of the book and he does extremely well portraying the characters and the world. One minor complaint: I think you should make twice as much paragraphs and make a new one each time someone talks; that way it’s much easier to get the flow going of how the reader interacts with the characters. Overall, I definitely recommend this book to all the Inkitt readers and if the author makes a new story, I’ll definitely check it out!"
good plot
"the story is not completed yet. I am writing the reviews while it's ongoing. That's why I can say that the plot is very nice. The vivid representation of all the characters. So, keep writing. Just focus on your punctuation and if possible highlight the dialogues. Otherwise, good story...keeps me engaged"
Great thus far
"The story is definitely interesting. I can see it developing into a really great book. The writing style is different, but after reading further you get used to it. The story itself is engaging, but I find it hard to get past the dialogue not having quotations. Overall it makes for a good read."
Evelyn Allen
"The book is amazing. You just have to work on some punctuation and grammer issues. This book reminds me of the hobbit trilogy but a amazing twist. I usually dont read books like this but its good . "
Great work!
"It's good and I liked your way of writing and your plot and you have a passion for writing though that I can see but you just have to do a little more editing and then it will be more great , all d best for your upcoming work , and seriously you are going good."
The Almighty Voyage
"It's a good story I guess even I did not read the rest but I like it and keep up the good work doll...your doing great so far and so when is the chapter will be release hm? "
Good book
"It is a good story but I’m just not into books like these. "
Great potential but need some editing.
"The book has very good potential to it. There’s almost nothing wrong with the plot. The thing here is the commas and apostrophes for me. You need some editing and your off to go. I’m not going to demotivate you by being too harsh. I’m not trying to sugar coat. This book has great potential but needs some editing for the punctuations. I really hope you make it far ahead in life author! 💜💜💜💜"
THE ALMIGHTY VOYAGE
"The story is so far intriguing. Quite a plot with a blend of different characters and worlds but, the sentence formation could be better. Overall the story is well written. Keep the good work going! "
its okay
"it has an amazing plot line but the dialoge looks like some thing that William Shakespeare would write, other than that it is amaxing and i will recommenbd this book to my friends"
Appealing!
"This is completely innovating writing style that abides to no conventional, implicit laws of writing, the style is unrestricted and sovereign. The dialogue is emphasized a lot in way that it is humorous and engaging. Definitely had my few rounds of laugh, a few grammatical errors need to be ironed out but all on all. Very winsome."
The Almighty Voyage
"This story is so awesome! I love how the plot is progressing and I love the long chapters. I love everything about the book so far. The only complaint I have is the lack of quotation marks, but besides that, there is nothing else to be said about the story. It’s a very nice read and it’s very enjoyable and entertaining."
Good Plot
"This story has a very good Plot and I can see, it has the potential to excel. I mean Fantasy, it's great. If you are searching for a good fantasy and adventurous novel to read, this is IT. The only problem I see, is that there are no quotation marks in the dialogues,so the readers are not able to figure out when a sentence ends and when the other person starts talking. But , apart from that, I think everyone is definitely going to like this book, infact they are gonna love IT. Atleast I did (≧▽≦)"
Very good start, good plot, but keep your style in mind!
"Your plot is quite intriguing, and you certainly have enough detail in your writing, which is only a good thing. Keep that up! However, if I may add a little piece of critique: You seemingly don't use the right '"' for when someone speaks, and you seem to forget ',' in some places as well, so that some sentences are rammed on together... But after you read through it once more, I'm sure you can get that out of your story and make it even better! Good luck and have fun writing your next chapters!"
Potential
"Use the free online software like ProWritingAid, Grammarly, or something else. This will allow you to get ninety percent better to were you want. This also needs dialogue that reads natural. For example listen to people in a grocery store, mall, cafe... how do there back and forth conversation sounds? Any story needs to immerse the reader as if they were a character. Think Game of Thrones. Why was it popular globally? Harry Potter? The characters and plot PULLED you into their world. You can do the same here. I am willing to be a beta reader to help you get where you are ready for the world.."
The Amazing Journey
"The plot has great potential. Please give all characters names not just numbers as a reader that was monotonous. Try writing as if characters are speaking with who said what so to keep reader invested I the story. It has amazing potential to be great. "
