What is your opinion?
A Lovely Story
"This is a very sweet little book. The characters are vulnerable, which allows the reader to experience a very even amount of sadness balanced with joy as the book goes throughout. I think it would be very relatable for teens and young adult especially when in a stage of life when self discovery is so intense and prominent."
Amazing!
"The intros of the girls itself made a huge difference. It was really good and unique. And the flow with which the story is going is perfect. There are few minute mistakes that caught my attention, but all in all it's an amazing story till now. Keep going🤗"
Would definitely recommend!!
"I loved the story a lot, impeccable plot, beautiful characters, and I'm absolutely swooning at Elizabeth. There are minor grammatical mistakes which I have written comments about. Apart from that, it's perfect."
Amazing!
"I find the book sooooooo cute. I was really curious when I saw the first two chapters. The small intros of the lovely girls. I am loving it already. Keep up the good work! Happy Writing!"
Vivid!
"The tone is fresh, the imagery VERY clear and unique. Well crafted, can't wait to see more! Quick to read, I just burned through it :) looking forward to more updates!"
I am hooked!
"The style of this story haunted me from the very beginning. I love how you begin this first chapter with poetry - its concision gives the prose an eerie feel and yet you're automatically inclined to read more. Amazing!"
I actually like this story, though I never read GL stories only BL. There was actually nothing wrong with it. Like at all. No spelling mistakes, no terrible grammar well probably there was but I was reading to fast.... . It was just perfect. It honestly seems like a book some famous author would make. Either ways I really liked it!
"I liked everything. Though the plot for me was not really my style. But for others it probably will. It's not to slow or fast. And I love it. "
Interesting read !
"So far a very interesting read. I've spotted a few grammar mistakes (mixing up pronouns) but they're not major enough to pull me out of the story, looking forward to reading more :) "
Great start!
"The way you structure your story is addictive - readers get deeply immersed in it. Your descriptions were quick and snappy, this makes the writing more beautiful. The characters were well developed, and their dialogs seemed real and believable, and this is a great achievement for any writer. Great work, Author. Keep writing. Would love to read more chapters of this story:)"
A Perfect Romance
"This book is so cute! The way there is small hintings of a budding romance but nothing else provides something to long for. The different description makes the book intriguing. I hope this book gets noticed more often! It definitely deserves it. Another thing that I love is the difference between this and Blood Season. This shows what you can do and shows more people the talent you have! Great work, author! It's like there's so much emotion. One question: Is this a personal story? Like is it about your own experiences?"
Amazing!
"O. M. G... Amazing! Just pulls you in! Please continue the story! Don't stop! Your story is just perfect! I just loved the 'gentle intensity'! The Dream is amazing! Please Continue! -Bloody Flames-Your Friend-"
lovely
"It's cute, but the first two chapters? was a poem? the third chapter also didn't say who was talking or expressing anything, just dialogues and then she talks with her dad, it was a bit confusing, i felt like the main characters, interpretation towards each other weren't strong enough, but still, it was a good read"
Great story; show, don't tell
"I liked the characters of the story. Having a character who starts out as a famous teen model adds an element of interest to the story. It's something out-of-the-ordinary, something that readers would be excited to experience through the character's life. But you can also see the main character's personal challenges; how she feels alone and her self-image issues, and that is something readers can relate to. I would only want the writing to be more alive. I want to see things happening as they did to Emily. Readers don't have to be told what is happening in the story...they can be shown. For example, the line in chapter 3: "Currently, because of the recent scandal, her dad's business wasn't the most popular around.' instead this could be expressed as 'No one asked for her autograph anymore, or begged her to hang out with them. Not since the big scandal at her dad's business,' With a sentence like that, the reader is informed of the scandal--which has changed her father's business' popularity--but we also get so see directly how it affects Emily, in a way that we experience the feeling along with her. We identify with how she feels by seeing what she goes through, rather than being told what she is going through. Keep that in mind as you write; just connect with the character's emotions, feelings, experience and write that. Readers will understand what you mean. Good job."
A Great Potential
"This book could be a really interesting coming-of-age story as I noticed the issues the characters were dealing with. Self-esteem, social life, bullying, love. Those are the things any teenager would face. Although the story itself is indeed interesting, there are some things you can improve. I feel the characteristics of the main characters were not strong enough for me to fall in love with. Emily was a teen model, but she actually had low self-esteem. What had caused this? Did she hate her dad? Had her dad done something she resented for? Then I can't say much about Elizabeth because she's just been introduced. I haven't figured out if you would develop romantic relationship between Emily and Elizabeth. I also feel that the plot is too fast and too slow at the same time somehow. I was kind of confused too because the point of view changed from Emily to Elizabeth, then back to Emily, without any 'change of color'. I spotted some writing mistakes. I wanted to just leave the feedback, but there was an issue. You might want to re-read your chapter before you publish the chapter to avoid typos. Anyway, with some polishing and better editing, this can me a good book. Keep writing! :) Regards, Kei Angelus"
