What is your opinion?
Tangled Desires
"There are a few grammatical errors but that's about it. Everything else is quite good. The flow, the description and the way the different characters are introduced. It's just perfect. I love it."
funny
"The entire story is funny and great to read."
Great Start!
"Very well written piece of work. The story seems very intriguing and the details are very lucid which makes it pretty cool!"
Interesting.
"I like that the author introduced new characters to the book at just the first chapter.. The author has a nice way of using words."
Excited 4 More
"This story has plenty of potential! The plot as a whole makes me want more! I think the first chapter is one of the most important in a book because that's one that will grab your audience. That's exactly what your book does! Great Job!"
Good start!
"After reading the first three chapters (through to the end of part one of chapter 3) you have an intriguing plot developing! The change in POV of characters is cool. You also describe the appearance of your characters very well. I would recommend to double check your work before publishing online to catch any mistakes and grammatical issues, as I found some while reading. You can retroactively edit what’s already been posted too. Otherwise it’s a great start! Keep up the good work!"
Fast paced and intense
"The pov style makes for a very intense experience and the way pace of the story only adds to that. The characters are developing nicely with an interesting mix of real world worry and almost surreal sadism. There is also a good background of humour at the right level to keep the drama of the story but lighten things up on occasion too. Im interested to see how the plot develops with the mix of myth and mafia. I did notice one or two spelling errors, but nothing major that detracted from the story."
Is there more?
"As promised, here it your review. You have something great here. Write some more to advance your story. You left me wondering what else is going to happen. Your mix of dialogue with story is perfect. Not too long and not too short. Kudos and keep up the good work."
A Compelling Story
"Right away the author draws us into this mafia story. In the very first chapter we meet mafia boss Karthika Cadman and he is torturing a man named Daniel for information. The first chapter is very immediate and action-packed but toward the second chapter where we have Alexander's perspective, it slows down and we get a flashback about Alex's memories of his mother. I think the author also does a good job with pacing so far, knowing when to slow down and give exposition and when to punctuation the passages with dialogue and action. I think this is a really good start. From the two chapters I read, it was obvious the book had tons of potential."
Super intriguing and very well written.
"Your descriptions are so vivid and I love it. It's a little dialogue heavy towards the end of chapter but I feel like it doesn't really take away from the action in the story. There's a lot of characters introduced in this first chapter and I'd love to read some more! 👍 Awesome job!"
