What is your opinion?
Gripping and Emotional!
"From the very start of this story you can see this book has potential. The prologue is amazing and I was immediately hooked. The first chapters are a bit slow and I think (in my very humble opinion) can be more flowing. However once the pace picks up the story becomes more relatable and emotional. I would also like to see some more back story for the characters because they all seem so interesting. What I really like is the dynamics between characters, the personality growth and the promising plot. I can't wait to read more! I will recommend!"
In love!!
"Who doesn't love a good mystery once in awhile? Because I sure do, wow this was something I've read a couple chapters but I can already see it's potential. The prologue=EVERYTHING❤, I love how it had this pull that made me want to continue reading. Emotions, check. I can't even put my own thoughts into words, half of my mind is still processing! I can't wait to finish💖"
Amazing!!!!
"Lovedddd thisssss so much 😍❤️ I'm so proud of you Doughnut ❤️ Please keep writing and producing beautiful stories like this one 🥺✨"
How Mine Ends
"I have not finished reading the book yet, but I am already in love with it. You have introduced your character beautiful and I love your detailed description of the character’s emotions and you set the tone perfectly. It only made me want to read more and more. It is definitely a page turner and I am looking forward to finishing the story! Amazing job! "
How Mine Ends
"I read the first six chapters, and I love the concept. The girl seems to be ill from a mysterious disease, but rather than wanting people to feel sorry for her and telling everyone, she just wants to make the most of life whilst she still can. That's a great attitude! The relationships with her friends at school were lovely, like a second family as you said in the book. One thing to improve on though, the length of your paragraphs. Your paragraphs are super long which makes it less clear for your audience to read as they might get a bit bogged down. You don't have to cut anything out, just divide your paragraphs to make them shorter."
Romance
"Ok, the story looks quite interesting. The plot seems intriguing but one thing I noticed the flow of the story seems a bit choppy. A few dialogues appear a bit forced but other than that I think the descriptions are very good. The book will turn out to be amazing im sure as I haven't read much. One thing, the book is very slow-paced for my taste but I think some people like it. I'll also appreciate the cover page coz it's very cute. Keep up the good work!!!"
How Mine End
"Okay, this title. Maybe it's because I haven't gotten too far in the book yet or maybe it's just my crazy mind, but this title isn't really... hitting different for me. I saw the title and thought, 'this is another cliche romance' and so far, nothing had proven me wrong. The main character has some sort of disease..? Couldn't really tell from the chapters that I've read. It was hard to read at the beginning because you used ' ' for someone talking and used " " for someone quoting another... didn't make sense. I loved the prologue though, kind of reminded me of the Twilight Saga. Like later on the prologue will be said again as another chapter later on..? (is that Jake, her ex?) About to finish reading now. 🙂 loves! stay cynful!"
How mine ends
"I loved your plot. The way the story progresses is at a great pace not too fast nor too slow. To be honest with you I was hooked from the start of your story. I think I would recommend this to anyone I know. Great work. "
Ever Wanted To Relive Your Youth? :D
"I'm intrigued by this story. :) The characters are likable and have kind and, at times, complex relationships. The main character is dealing with some... main character drama, haha - mysterious illness and bad love life blast from the past, but she's managing in her own teenage way. At times, the story can be a bit hard to follow with all the character names, short intros, and grammar changes, but I think, with editing, these can be fixed easily enough. I say give this story a shot if you're in the mood to relive your teenage years as the main character in a romance. :D (Just ignore the maybe, maybe not murder. aspect of your teenage reimagination O.O)..."
An interesting start!
"(Read til the end of chapter 9) This was an interesting start! The author describes the emotions of the characters very well, as well as the settings. The descriptions are well done, especially in the opening chapter, it was very vivid and passionate. The characters come across well too. I liked that the MC had a good relationship with her parents rather than the usual angst-y interactions seen between teens and their parents. It was a nice dynamic, as was the MC's relationships with her friends. It was a refreshing approach that worked well here. The dialogue was also well written and realistic, so props to the author with that. There were a few times times where the tenses changed (especially the prologue) and some of the paragraphs could be shortened a bit to help with readability, but all in all, twas an interesting opening with some lovely descriptions. Good job! :)"
How mine ends
"It's a good story. The plot is very interesting.The start of the story is also strong. But at some parts it's very slow,I started losing interest in it and the flow is also not great. It has lots of potential because the storyline is great, so with some editing it will a great story. Good Luck."
Interesting Romance
"I have only read the first two chapters but it is clear that some real passion is about to blossom. From the prologue, we get a glimpse of regret and deep desire. I like how this story is written in a different POV way. I haven't read enough to get a real idea about the plot but it does seem to be interesting. I think you need to work on how to better make your words flow more naturally, and the best way to do that is to keep writing and also read your work to yourself out loud. Most dialogues between characters seem real but the descriptions looses me at time."
