What is your opinion?
Interesting Plot
"I found the plot to this story to be particularly interesting. Stories that combine something as creative and personal as music with sorcery or magic will definitely grab attention. Great start!!"
Interesting
"This story has an interesting concept when it comes to the story plot. It's a captivating story with vampires and fairies (I love stories that has the word Vampire). I liked the character interactions very much here. I also loved the way writer has written the story. The flashback setting of the story turned out really good then I expected. The grammar is pretty good except for some typos. But I believe it could be easily edited with a reread. However, the only thing in the story needs to be focused is a detailed description of certain parts mainly the images of certain environment and characters. Though, I also wouldn't suggest going overboard with the description because sometimes too much description brings boredom to reading and decreases the review rate. Subtle and balanced description will do the trick. In the end, I believe the author understands her story much better than anyone else. Besides, this story has so much potential that I hope she will edit to her version of perfection. And, once she's done I'm sure this story will be a wonderful piece to read and recommend. Good luck on writing! It was a nice read so far and I'll look forward to the future updates."
Enthralled
"I’m kinda digging this. I’m really wanting to know what happens next! I won’t lie I was a little iffy at first because the first chapter was a lot of different things all at once without a lot of background, but once I kept going and the background fell in I really enjoyed it!! And I can’t wait until you finish it! "
AMAZING
"Your story is great! The plot is so original and that is actually what kept me reading. I put 4/5 stars in the last one because of some small mistakes you made (nothing serious e.g. it's today not to-day). Can't wait for more and you also have my vote for that novel contest!"
Fantastical start!
"Your story, as I know from reading the first chapter, has so much potential. If I ever get time in my life, I will be thrilled to read the rest of it. From the first paragraphs in the story, you introduce a main character, her family, her cat, and her dilemma. That's really impressive, so good job. Also, the cover is beautiful. Spot on. Lastly, your book has all the elements to build a huge, intricate world full of faeries, vampires, and the like. Capitalize on that. Take advantage of the specialness of the world-building trait of your story. Good luck ahead, Alexia Whitelock"
Excellent Beginning
"This is an excellent start to your novel. I am already hooked and want to know more. If there was more written I would have read on happily. I think you have done well in setting up your story. I liked your characters and the detail of your fight scenes. Though it is only the beginning I recommend this to all that love a good fantasy novel. I look forward to more for you, and finding out where this story goes. Good luck with your writing I see a bright future for you."
Nice!
"The further I read, the better it got. Your world building is great, as you've invented a whole new society with a whole new background. You also have distinct characters - I particularly enjoyed Stella's flashbacks and her relatable flaws and struggles - like thinking she'd lost her sister due to marriage. At times, the story was not to my taste (possibly due to the genre) but that's only my taste, and this book certainly has potential! You certainly have character development for Bethy! At times I was confused as to who is who - with Ken for example - but with the vampires, you suddenly speed thing up, and I can remember what you wrote as imagery, as if I'd seen it in a film or such. Overall, well done!"
Very well done
"Though I only read a bit of it, the story so far is pretty enjoyable. I love the plot/story line so far, and definitely plan on reading more soon."
Captivating
"I love how you combine every element in your story. The plot is interesting. I read three chapters already and it makes me going. "
The Princess Entourage
"Very creative! There were a few typos that made the story difficult to understand (like once where you wrote Stella instead of Isabella), but overall the story is well put together. I like how you portray the tension between Ken and Marie. It seems very natural. Also having the "flashbacks" kept the reader interested and really gave good insight to the backstory without ruining any of the tension. Good job!"
Review of the Princess Entourage
"A love story tangled up within the themes of adventure and fantasy. The plot is very interesting- not something I was expecting. It steps out of the box of a classic adventure story too. It’s unpredictable and I’m enjoying the character buildup as the story progresses chapter by chapter. I wish there could be some relationship building between Beth and Daniel too (but maybe it's yet to come). In terms of things I think could be improved. You could reread your story and perfect the grammar. There are more than 6-7 sentences or statements that are incoherent due to spell check changes. I would absolutely love if you read back through and made some changes to the scenery and the background these characters are in. Is there a smell? A certain object that stands out to them in Phillips home? What color are the walls in Stella’s home? You need to build the surroundings in order to pull the readers into the book. That being said. I am not able to picture what the characters physical features are. Your readers should be able to draw a picture of them each time they're introduced. Otherwise this book is definitely one I would finish reading once these changes are made! Keep up the good work and happy writing!"
Fairies and Vampires
"This is an ongoing story still, so I can't say the critiques I'm about to write will pertain to the rest of the story. Usually, fantasy novels regarding vampires often involve werewolves. So it was a very nice surprise to see it is actually FAIRIES vs vampires, and I personally think the writing world haven't given enough attention to these particular creatures in the last few years. That already gives me bonus points to the plot. I can tell that this is a rough draft, so I'm sure the author will likely have these smoothed out by the time she's completed the novel. I think the biggest critique I have is to add some description! You've got the dialogue down between the characters, which is something that other authors can struggle with, but I would've definitely liked to just see the world around me as well as the people. It really helps paint the world more colorfully. There's also grammatical errors, but that's just something that needs to be finetuned after she's done writing the novel."
Hooked!
"I've only read the first three chapters so far, but I'm intrigued to find out more. So far, i'd definitely recommend it and I can't wait to read on 😊"
Great piece
"This story has great potential. The description of your main character,her life and relations are amazing. I didn't have any issue with your story. Great story. "
Intriguing Plot
"The novel has a good plot that pushes the reader to read ahead. It narrates the story of the growth of a yound girl who struggles to be normal but realises the importance of her responsibilities. I would reccommend the author to add more scenic description to make the story more picturesque. All in all, it's a good book. "
