An amazing story that will draw you in!
"A great story which will develop into something great from the looks of it. I was immediately hooked in after reading the blurb and diving into the first few chapters. Super detailed descriptions which helped me sink into the story and truly fall into the moment and what these characters were going through.
The only suggestion I have for further improving this great story is to take a look at dialogue tags and action beats! Although the writing style is very vivid and detailed oriented, I noticed in some areas of dialogue that gestures, movements, and/or facial expressions are missing within sections to add to the flow of things. You could do a quick research on how to use action beats properly before, between, and/or after a character is speaking to help enrich your character’s voices. Keep in mind these tags and beats act as rhythm moderators.
Again, your writing style is beautiful and executed just as so! I was absolutely enthralled with this thrilling story and found myself flipping page after page. The characters were realistic and deep, very easy to get a feel of who they are as an individual. The damn situations had my heart in my throat too haha the moments of suspense with every beat, my god, I was hooked!!
Great work and keep it up! Please don’t ever feel discouraged, you’re doing amazing 🖤"
