What is your opinion?
Gripping
"This was such a good read. I'm a sucker for short psychological horror like this. I have to guess that it was everyone just not caring about her so completely that caused her condition to appear in the first place. Even her own mother only called to ask for favors that she didn't want to do herself, and when she did ask if her daughter was okay, it was more of an afterthought than anything else. The story doesn't even mention the main character's name, which felt fitting—not even the reader will remember her. It reminds me of a college thought paper I once read about whether people were ever real in the first place if no one can remember them. I imagine a lot of people share this fear and it's what drives the need to leave a footprint behind. There's a part I remember vividly about fearing the things behind you not existing if you can't see them—especially people, like loved ones. Sort of like an actual Schrodinger's condition rather than just a thought experiment. The writer countered this by holding hands, so they didn't have to keep looking over their shoulder to make sure someone was still there. Anyway—I'm so glad I found this story! You're a great writer and I thoroughly enjoyed this work."
Eery, Fantastical, Cultivating
"Unique story. I enjoyed the 5 minutes it took me to read it, and this is a story that will stay in the back of my mind forever. This is a once in a lifetime read."
One of the best stories I've read on Inkitt
"The sheer amount of craft and confidence in this piece is astounding. The author has a strong command of their narrative and the chilling way that the story unfolds makes for a great piece of uncanny fiction. I like the way that every moment has tension and immediacy, and I appreciated the use of present tense in telling the narrative. It's an odd little tragedy of a story and I really liked it."
Cool Idea
"Hey there! I read your story and it was very interesting! Not the interesting like, "Oh, cool, I guess," but the, "Huh, That was deep...it made me think," kind of interesting. It was deep and written well. Keep up the good work!"
Amazing!
"This. Was. AMAZING! *_* Oh my gosh...it's been a while since I read a short this good. It kept me on my toes, and after every words I was dying to read more. It had the allure of horror and mystery, and I just ate everything up. At first I wasn't sure what direction the story would take--but when parts of her started disappearing, I was like ''Ah, I see now." I thought it was sad that her boyfriend and friend didn't seem to care about her much. One was always distracted by the computer, and the other was absorbed in her own personal life. Matt forgets about the mole, Jane cancels plans. At this point, they're already forgetting about her. And soon she starts forgetting about them. I feel like this story begs the questions, "If we don't acknowledge something, does it exist? What is real and what isn't?" Questioning your existence can be a scary and thing, and you've most definitely captures that frightening feeling. Technical wise, I didn't spot a single grammatical error, and your style is one that I enjoy. Fantastic work!"
Just beautiful
"Oh my God, I loved it all! Just the concept of slowly fading away, tiny bit by bit seems so horrifying. You've touched deep into every humans fear of being left alone, behind. The part where you took away her eyes seems most morbid of all, but then again without her eyes she could cling to the picture of self she had before.. Perfectly captivating the numbness of the soul, that slowly turns into a serious doubt of existence."
AMAZING!
"This was incredible! I completely LOVED it! No answer as to what's happening to her. Genius :) I adore stories like that. Where you have to guess why and there is no explanation.What if somebody did find her? They wouldn't find anything. But she wasn't just disappearing physically, it was emotionally too. Withdrawing from everyone. Love, love, love."
Creepy in a good way
"I don't know what you were aiming for, but this is really good. Especially the suspense. It comes out slowly and I was creeped out but in a good way. I liked it, I really do, and it had an interesting plot/style and everything. It was very well organized, and the part about the single eye was especially scary. The last sentence is mesmerizing, too. I hope you write more like this!"
Perfect
"This is an extremely well written short horror story. your writing is fluent and flows at an easy pace. I liked the plot of the story - although the girl's terror could have shown a bit more at the end. But the shortness of it is probably what makes it so scary. It is an interesting topic to write on. This story is of publishable in perhaps an anthology, or would get high marks if it was submitted as an assignment. Well done and keep writing!"
Excellent, Excellent!
"Wow, that was something else. This story really made me think. I really enjoyed this. Everything about it was excellent and, honestly, scary. It's the kind of gore without the gore; body horror, I think people call it. The characters are interesting, and the way it's written keeps you riveted. I'd say, if you're going to read something today, read this! To the author, excellent job!"
Surfaced
"Brilliant. No other word for it. As a writer myself, I understand how an idea like this can hatch and demand to be written! It speaks of many things; but mainly life as a whole. The thought of people forgetting you; being left behind, or ignored by those we love. Fantastic tale! Keep it up, Jessica. I will look out for more of your stories on here. Richard."
Beauty Re-Defined
"This story was beautiful in every way. The care with which the narrator is described, the slow transformation into nothingness and the powerful nature of her character left me with deep-rooted appreciation for the story. There was so much importance given even to the minor characters, such as Abbie, whose resourcefulness and tact shines through even in the little part she plays. Matt represented to me every woman's disgruntled lover, estranged by the chains of time and routine. His lack of concern for the narrator's plight was unsurprising, and I knew he would leave her before he did so. There was a lot of wry humour injected into the story. "Perhaps I am turning to a plant" was perhaps the finest example of this. The sadness behind her earrings not being noticed by anyone was jarring. There was a lot of beauty and subtlety with which every aspect of her life was explored, and my favourite part was the recount of all her piercings. They represented each stage of her growing up, and ended up with essentially the most important thing - Abbie who was a lawyer, hot and kind, represented the quintessential woman. This was in stark contrast to the narrator who found herself vanishing. The parting thought was amazing, and left me in awe. Great job!"
Very well done. .
"I have my own guesses as to what the story symbolizes, given the context. But the body horror of piecemeal disappearance struck me as original and every bit as unsettling as intended. It's a surprise and a shame that this author has only one published story, I'd like to read more."
Wonderful Madness
"I love these types of stories. Insanity building and building. The pace at which this story is written keeps you gripped with urgency hastily anticipating how it will end. Can't wait to read more of JG's tales!"
Hair Raising
"At the very beginning with the mole - and then the nail, I could feel part of my skin crawl. Overall a very good story and extremely interesting. I enjoyed the way you ended it - it was low tune but very personal. The beginning of the story had some odd/awkward 'switches' in the middle of paragraphs (at least to me) which is the only reason I didn't give 5/5. Other than that - excellent execution. Thank you for sharing, I enjoyed your story!"
A Very Chilling Story
"I loved this, it was so eerie and terrifying, especially as it started off so normal and familiar. I loved how she felt like she was disappearing even before it started physically happening - that her boyfriend never got her Chinese order right; that her friend was so busy waffling on that she didn't notice anything odd; that no one had spotted her ear piercings apart from Annie. I wasn't sure if the changes to her body were physical or in her mind, but either way it was horrific, especially when her eyes disappeared followed by her mouth, yet she could still hear. A very chilling story, well told."
Reveiwing
"Holy crap, okay, lemme catch my breath for a second here! :D Okay, so first things first, that was really cool. Cool in a subtly horrifying way that made me reach up and touch my ears every so often to make sure they were still there.. You're very good, and I don't know if anyone's told you that lately but you are. I rated the plot like I did simply because as it is a short story the plot is basically "she disappears" and that's not the complicated type I like or am used to (it's still very good; that's just personal preference, so don't mind me over here lol). Keep writing; I enjoy it."
Very impressive!
"I must say, I enjoyed your story very much! The suspense was amazingly preserved and the plot flowed smoothly! I really liked the way this was written and especially enjoyed the concluding sentence as well. Amazing job, keep up the good work!"
Surfaced: Review
"As this is my first review on this site, please take this with a grain of salt. A whole shaker of salt if need be. When I hear read a synopsis of a person not knowing if they're going insane it intrigues me. Especially if it's a short story. This type of medium lends itself wonderfully to this type of psychological plot. Bottom line: I liked it. I liked it enough to write a review! The story pushed me to read until the end and I was not disappointed. There were a couple places where the story dragged on a bit, but nothing to pull me away entirely. Something about the loss of parts of oneself, but not in a gruesome way, is something that I don't see much. And this author portrays it well. A nice read. I hope to see more."
Excellence
"I think that this story is very good. You have a beautiful writing style that really makes me feel for your main character. A few little things that I would comment on, though, are the pacing. It seemed a little slow in the beginning, and then the changes in the main character sped up very quickly. She also seemed like she was not very worried about what was happening to her. I really enjoyed it overall, though. Thank you for writing this!"
